Second verison of power ranger sector force

[sector_force_ranger]

Before Part 1

Before it happen, there was a rangers of different kinds but one by one they fall till only afew destroyed the last kinds of enemies. Afew years later two teenagers were lost in a forest in singapore, while lost they found doctor oliver once thought a lost legened never ever thought was seen again but he told the teenagers that he was blasted of from another place to singapore so now he help the two, they were the youngest rangers ever. They found abllity with elements of their own. Now, they are going throught high school.
Different high school, yet they are need some helps from new rangers.

[sector_force_ranger]

Red Ranger :
Name : Edric Chan
Age : 13
Abllitys : Being the leader he is able to burn things up with his control of fire and don't mess with his beast form, you'll be finding yourself becoming a hotie!

Blue Ranger :
Name : Suzzy Tan
Age : 13
Abllitys : The second in command, bring you driving gear cause you will be staying in water for a long time, and her beast form is as strong as the blue whale in the sea!

Green Ranger :
Name : Troy West
Age : 13
Abllitys : Run for your lives because you won't wanna mess with him, he'll shake the ground till your head spins and in beast form, be ready to run cause you will be flying in air once you mess with him!

Yellow Ranger :
Name : Oh Joanne
Age : 13
Abllitys : Make sure you take somthing heavy or you will be blow by her till you reach the o-zone layer and her beast form will make things fly in the sky!

White Ranger :
Name : David Thiong
Age : 13
Abllitys : Get your jackets cause you will freeze like mad once you meet him , he is as cool as ice and his beast form will make you run away!

Orange Ranger :
Name : ???
Age : ???
Abllitys : Charater have not come out.

[sector_force_ranger]

Edric : It's Been a long time and now it's time to go to a new school, eh dude.

Troy : Yea , it's been a long time, i'm still not sure i'll get use to this new place , well here goes nothing!

Edric : Wow it's amazing , nice.

(The Bell Rings)

Troy : Oh man hurry we'll late for class run!!

(After school)

Troy : I'm not use to this school as a Normal Technican I guess it's abit easier then express.

Dr.Oliver : Rangers, report to base now!

Both : On our way. Teleporter mode now!

Edric : What is it Dr.O?

Dr.Oliver : A monster is attacking at mejars high school!

Both : What, our high school!

Troy : Ok then the monster is going to have a low down punch.

Both : Transformation time!

Troy : Rhino Up!

(Incase you want to imagine the transformation it's like the person transforming totally white then the suit break out of the white thing and then the marking on the helmet*V- Red X- Green =- Blue +- Yellow W- White* ,then the whole mask fully covers it)

Green Sector Ranger : *Transformation complete* Green Sector Ranger!

Edric : Tiger Up!

Red Sector Ranger : *Transformation complete* Red Sector Ranger!

(At School)

All In The School : Ah!!!!!!

Suzzy : You aren't going to stop me, aim dogde ball fire!

(The dogde balls hits the Guard-Bots *also known as the minoins of the evil Master*)

Joanne and David : Lets get things going! Blackjack!

(They flatted the Guard-Bots)

Suzzy, Joanne and David : Theres too many of them, we can't defeat them.

Rangers : Not till they meet us!

The trio : Rangers!?

Green Sector Ranger : Lets go Red!

Red Sector Ranger : Right back at cha!

GSR : Rhino Drill!

RSR : Tiger Sword!

Both : Let do this!

To be continue

[Windcatpersonthing]

Not horrendously unreadable, but not even close to mediocre. Spelling mistakes that are just plain ridiculous, characters that seem kinda ill-thought out beyond their ability descriptions, a lack of actual description that isn't an author's note, and dialogue that veers between average and confusing ("aim dogde ball fire"). This could be salvaged if you actually seriously revised your writings before postage.

[GundamExia]

What is up with people and the terrible barebones script wannabe style lately?

Refer to my critique of runefan's story, most of it holds true for this one.

[sector_force_ranger]

... i'm not an american, i live in singapore, i'm not good at proper english. ok?

[Shoichi]

Not an excuse. I live in Singapore too, I am a born and bred 18-year old Singaporean, and come on lah, WE DO learn standard British English here.

It's not very good an excuse to be not good at proper English when you are from Singapore, let me guess, you are Sec 1 this year?

If you need any help in language you can look for me if you want to.

[sector_force_ranger]

ok thanks lol zzz