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a16m26
07-16-2006, 04:00 AM
Chapter 1

its been weird since me and shane left tokyo and came
to phillidelphia .me and shane moved into my big sisters
house.my little sister sara went to live with her dad
since she still has a year of high school left .my big sis
moved to new jersy to get away from an abuseive husband.
weve been at this college for about well this is our second day and made tons of freinds but liltle did we know things were going to change foever.

a large colledge with tons of young adults running about
some sitting in the grass studeing some just talking.
alot over at the basket ball court.inside down the hall stood a young african american man wearing a black hoodie with a duerag .standing next to him was a young cacasion male wearing a red t and black jeans.

so what you get on your exam the cacasion asked as he took a book out his locker.

not something to get me on the honor rooll shane
he replied.

just the two females come down stairs.one wearing
glasses with thick black hair wearing a green dress.but it was her capanion
who caught kevons eye a bruenett asian girl with haizill eyes wearing a leather top with a dark leather skirt.

the girl in the lether glanced over at kevon and shane an said
hey kev hey shane .

kevon just nodded his head.shane said whats up lexy.

as they walked away they talked .

why does he never say anything he just nodds.said lexy .

well why is he always in a hoodie.said tanya.

hes probaly fat and trying to hide it .replied lexy.

*
in the icy contident of ant artica

its time said a dark voice

get the tangas ready.

*
it was the end of first period and kevon and
shane were chillin out side when lexy walked by.

hey hows it goin.she said as she walked towards them

just as kevon was about to answer her for the first time
a large van pulled up. a man with spiky hair and glasses poked out and
motioned his hand to kevon and shane to come over .they both rose and walked over to the van and hoped in.leaving lexy with a confused look on her
face.

kevon spoke up first.so billy whats the trouble.

it seems zed has returned for his payback.billy replied
he tapped a few keys on his laptop and said.see a army of
tangas.

well looks like were back in action.said shane.

billy pulled out a metal box and gave it to the two.
i belive youll need thease.

they grabed there morphers and yelledBIO MORPH!
to be continued.......

a16m26
07-16-2006, 04:02 AM
excuse how short it is im just tierd

T-Rexor Ranger
07-16-2006, 04:14 AM
Ok.... How should I put this...lightly? Umm....you can't write.

TOK-715
07-16-2006, 05:48 AM
excuse how short it is im just tierd

Real fanfic writers does not use that as an excuse. They put more time & effort into it. You should not have rushed it just because you wanted it posted A.S.A.P.

Hedister
07-16-2006, 05:55 AM
Dude I write fan fictions all the time and I have slight experience in the matter. If it is short, and not typed with decent gramma and looks un-tidy then the likelyness is that it won't be read by many members. Effort is everything.

ShadowRanger
07-16-2006, 05:59 AM
This is plain awful, but I am unable to close a thread just because the author doesn't care enough to spell check his work. Sentences and proper nouns start with a CAPITAL letter, if you don't know that rule or don't care enough to follow it, then you have no business trying to post fanfiction here.

Just so you are aware it will not be closed on request. Don't start another thread or you will be considered spamming.

Angelfox
07-17-2006, 01:24 AM
this is getting old...a great idea and storyline slaughtered by a kid who cant and wont make an effort...WHAAAAAAAA

i worry for the next generation....

Storm Warrior2
07-17-2006, 01:30 AM
Kid, I really hope you're not planning to pursue a career as a writer. If you are, may I suggest a career more suited to your mindset? For example, a career in breaking rocks open with your head? Or manual labor?

Angelfox
07-17-2006, 01:32 AM
i hear there lookin for new rock breakers in gitmo and leavenworth

Storm Warrior2
07-17-2006, 03:55 PM
So, dumbass mcgee pm'd me. Enjoy.

you .....you oh its on. oh belive me when i say itsON.

TOK-715
07-17-2006, 03:59 PM
So, dumbass mcgee pm'd me. Enjoy.

Ignore him on PM.

Storm Warrior2
07-17-2006, 04:03 PM
Will do, sir.

Imperialwar
07-17-2006, 05:27 PM
billy pulled out a metal box and gave it to the two.
i belive youll need thease.

they grabed there morphers

How does your variation of the guyver type armor work in your fic?

Angelfox
07-17-2006, 06:30 PM
no offense angel or fox but your startin to piss me off.

so we're pissing you off are we...GOOD...u have no idea how happy that makes us, and i realize we could be banned for this post but it would be worth it...you cant write, you make no effort, you simply dont learn, you think your the best damm thing to RB when in reality all you have is half assed hair brained idea that you cant even figure out, give it up and let Storm Warrior2 have the idea, he did a much better job than you ever will

a16m26
07-17-2006, 06:30 PM
im one of the youngest members her and the moderators have something aginst me,the members have somethin aginst me what the hell did i do for you to hate me so damn much damn!

Angelfox
07-17-2006, 06:31 PM
read our above post, we dont speak for everyone but im sure we're not far off

TOK-715
07-17-2006, 06:39 PM
im one of the youngest members her and the moderators have something aginst me,the members have somethin aginst me what the hell did i do for you to hate me so damn much damn!

The thing we have against you is that you're walking all over the English language - and don't you dare use your age as your sorry ass excuse because none of my cousins (13 & younger) types that horribly online. You're just asking for it whenever you try to right. Get it through your head, it's nothing personal to who you are, you're just posting effortless stories one after another. And you actually expect people to respect you for it? >_>

Now either you can get back to your story (whether you write good or bad) or I'll close this thread if you continue to have a hissy fit & you're officially banned from starting any more fanfic threads.

Angelfox
07-17-2006, 06:42 PM
I'll close this thread if you continue to have a hissy fit & you're officially banned from starting any more fanfic threads.


would u please do that anyway???

a16m26
07-17-2006, 06:42 PM
:mad: :mad: :mad: :mad: :mad:

a16m26
07-17-2006, 06:43 PM
sorry:shame: :shame:

TOK-715
07-17-2006, 06:43 PM
No, and I ask that everyone that has a problem with his writing to just stop posting all together.

TOK-715
07-17-2006, 06:46 PM
:076: :076: dammit! thats it im throgh trying to win over you guys .
seeya around im throgh writing fics .:088: :088: :088: :005: :005:

You can't win anyone over with horrible writing. It just shows how effortless you are.
Since you're calling it quits, don't ever start any more fanfic threads - this ridiculous spam-fest needs to end once & for all.