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CrudeSword
04-03-2006, 04:07 AM
After the rangers' zords that were the Dinozords become the new Thunder Zords, changes were starting to appear. The rangers' powers were full of thunder and lightning. Because the radical changes of the zords, the zords give their masters a new power. Jason's suit starts to change. From the white-diamonded shaped boots and suit becomes a more oriental look (sharing the look of the future White Ranger would adopt as). The tyrannosaur helmet becomes a dragon helmet like his Red Dragon Thunderzord. The other rangers changes after Jason. The most radical change was Zack's change. Instead of the Black Ranger suit that he once have, becomes green. Then the conversion was over! Jason took off his new dragon helmet and spoke.

Jason: What happen to our dinosaur ranger suits?
Zack: Yeah?! My suit becomes green.

Then Zordon replied.

Zordon: It is because that since I have change the old zords into Thunderzords, your Thunderzords given you new changes to your original suits. From now on, Jason, you are the Red Dragon Thunder Ranger. Zack, you are the Green Lion Thunder Ranger because of the Lion's color. Billy, you are the Blue Pegasus Ranger. Trini, you are the Yellow Kirlin Thunder Ranger. And Kimberly, you are the Pink Phoenix Thunder Ranger.

Kimberly asks.

Kimberly: What about Tommy?

Zordon: Because Tommy's Green Ranger powers were weak, I will have to fin another power source to replace his old powers. So for some time, Tommy would be in out of commission of a while, unless he is really needed.

(Because in the future, Tommy would become the White Ranger, so Zordon has been thinking of creating a ranger with his powers.)

Time passes by, and new rangers replaced old rangers. As Jason, Zack and Trini went to the Peace Conference; Rocky, Adam and Aisha becomes the Red, Green and Yellow Ranger.

havemercy
04-03-2006, 09:00 AM
my eYes! They burn!

TSoldier
04-03-2006, 09:55 AM
After the rangers' zords that were the Dinozords become the new Thunder Zords, changes were starting to appear.
Just this first sentence was off-putting. So, basically, after changes started to appear, changes started to appear? There are plenty of different ways to write that better.

The transformation of the Ranger's Dinozord's to Thunderzord's was a significant change, but it wasn't the first they'd undergone, and as they'd soon learn, it wouldn't be their last....

Then you could go into how the Ranger forms changed to accomodate the new Thunderzords and powers. This was more like a short scene, not a short story. What was your goal here? Is this the intro to a story you're writing?

Angelfox
04-03-2006, 04:24 PM
gotta go with T-soldier on that one, an interesting idea for how tommy was chosen and why...but it does need a lot of work with your writing style...

BLANKS
04-03-2006, 05:37 PM
a lot of good potiental, just need some work on your writing style. An interesting idea though, on how they could have ended up with the Dairanger costumes in Saban had decided to use them....

Mexican Ranger
04-03-2006, 05:42 PM
http://rangerboard.com/showthread.php?t=84454
http://rangerboard.com/showthread.php?t=84811