Mighty Morphin Power Rangers: Thunder Warriors

[Mexican Ranger]

Mighty Morphin Power Rangers: Thunder Warriors

Episode 1 Dethroned

We see Rita and Goldar arguing about what happened the episode before. "It's all your fault!" yelled Rita. "What are you talking about I didn't pick that guy to send out there!" yelled Goldar. Finster interupts the two. "Rita, I have a new monster that would take out the Dinozords." "See there, he's the one who makes the monsters, not me." continued Goldar.

A sudden "moonquake" begins. "Whoa," yelled Rita, "What's going on?" A mysterous being appears. "Lord Zedd!" yelled Rita. "Shut up!" yelled Zedd. Zedd makes Rita smaller and puts her into a can. "Now, I will send you off." said Zedd. Zedd throws the can out into space.

"Lord, I am here to assist you." said Goldar. Goldar and Finster bow in front of Zedd. "Get up," yelled Zedd, "Now I will have those Power Ranger destroyed once and for all!"

Jason and Tommy are at the Angel Grove Youth Center. Suddenly Kimberly runs into the Youth Center and up to Jason and Tommy. "We need to get to the hospital." said Kimberly. They run out of the Youth Center.

They arrive at Angel Grove Hospital. They see Trini and Billy talking to Zack, who has his head down, Zack's family is also there. "What's going on?" asked Jason. "Zack's mom has something wrong with her and needed to come to the hospital." answered Kimberly. Zack puts his head up and smiles at Jason, Kimberly and Tommy. "Hi, guys." said Zack. "Hey." said Tommy. The doctor comes out to talk to Zack's family.

"She's alright for the time being." told the doctor to Zack's family. "That's good." said Billy to Zack. "Yeah." said Zack. Their communicators go off. They go to an area of the hospital where no one is around. "Yeah." said Jason. "Teleport to the Command Center, we got something to tell you guys." said Alpha. "Stay there Zack, you need to be with your family" said Zordon. "Ok, Zordon." said Zack. The Rangers look at Zack and they shake their head at him and he does the same to them. They run out of the hospital and teleport.

They get to the Command Center. "Hey, what's going on?" asked Tommy. The Rangers walk up to Zordon. "Behold the Viewing Globe." said Zordon.

The Rangers walk up to the Viewing Globe, they see Lord Zedd watching Finster mold a new kind of Puddies. "Who is this guy?" asked Trini. "His name is Lord Zedd", answered Zordon, "He was the master of Rita, teaching her his ways. He disappeared for awhile and is now back ready to finish what Rita began."

The Rangers look back at Zordon. "To take over?" asked Kimberly. "Yes." answered Zordon. "What about Rita?" asked Billy. "Yeah, what happened to her?" asked Trini. "She is in a can somewhere in space. Zedd put her in it and throw it into space." answered Zordon. The alarm goes off. "Ai yi yi yi yi!" said Alpha.

The Rangers go back to look at the Viewing Globe, they see the new Puddies and a monster, which looks like a big magnet, in the city. "Lord Zedd had sent out one of his monsters and those Puddies to disturb the city." said Zordon. "We got to get out there," said Jason, "It's morphing time!"

DRAGONZORD!

PTERODACTYL!

TRICERATOPS!

SABERTOOTH TIGER!

TYRANNOSAURUS!

The Power Rangers get to the monster and the Puddies. Suddenly the bunch of Puddies start fighting the Power Rangers. "This must be the new Puddies!" said Billy.

Billy, Trini, and Kimberly begin to fight the Puddies. Jason and Tommy fight the monster. Trini gets a hold of one of the Puddies and punches the large Z on its chest. When she does that, the Puddie breaks apart and disappears. "Punch the Z on their chest!" yelled Trini. "What?" said Kimberly. A Puddie comes up to Kimberly and she punchs the Z. "Huh." said Billy.

Jason and Tommy continue to fight the monster. When the others are finished with the Puddies, they help Jason and Tommy.

They break away from the monster. "Zedd! I need more help!" yelled the monster. We see Lord Zedd in his chair. He then gets up to look out at Earth. "Magneton, grow!" He then rises out his staff and a electrical beam comes out and hits Magneton. Magneton grows.

"How are we going to defeat Magneton with the Megazord without the Mastodon?" said Kimberly. "We'll all have to fight him without the Megazord." said Jason. "Okay guys!" said Jason. "Right," yelled the Power Rangers, "We need Dinozord Power now!"

The Pterodactyl, Triceratops, Sabertooth Tiger, and Tyrannosaurus come out of their hidding places. Tommy then calls for the Dragonzord with the Dragon Dagger. The Dragonzord comes out of the sea. The Rangers jump into their zords.

"We need to attack him at the same time!" said Jason. "Right!" said the Power Rangers. They began to attack Magneton at the same time but it doesn't work. Then Magneton uses a force of energy to blow the zords back. "What was that?" said Trini. "You guys are funny," said Magneton, "Now I will use my magnet powers to take away your Power Coins!"

His magnet force, with colors of each the Power Rangers, takes the Power Coins to Magneton's hand. The Power Rangers try to fight it but, they can't. Zack is still at the hospital, the force takes his Power Coin and take it goes Magneton's hand also. Zack doesn't even notice the force taking it away.

The Power Rangers fall out of their Dinozords, demorphed, and onto the ground. "What's going on?" said Trini. "The Dinozords rejected us because we don't have the Power Coins with us." said Billy.

Magneton laughs. "Stupid Power Rangers." said Magneton. He teleports back to Lord Zedd's Palace back on the moon. "No, what do we do without our Power Coins?" said Jason.

Magneton gets to the palace, Zedd is sitting in his chair with Goldar are standing next to him. Magneton approaches Zedd. Zedd takes the coins and gets up. He walks up to a table. It has six pure black Power Morphers. He puts the Power Coins in the morphers.

"Now I will use the Power Coins and for evil." said Zedd while putting the Power Coins in the morphers. "Yes!" yelled Mageton and Goldar. Zedd walks up to the balcony and looks out the earth. "I got you now, Power Rangers. I will take over!" yelled Zedd. Magneton and Goldar walk to the sides of Zedd and they start laughing.

TO BE CONTINUED...

Is it atleast ok? I did about 4 episodes already and right now I'm revising them. Would you like to read more?

[PHAETON]

Pretty, Interesting Start you have her....But instead of actually saying, say for instasce " Rita and Goldar arguing about what happened in the last battle" Actually describe to us what transpired...It's got me interested, but I still think you should revise and try to beef it up alot more

[Mexican Ranger]

yea, ok thats for the feedback

[Mexican Ranger]

Mighty Morphin Power Rangers: Thunder Warriors
Episode 1 Dethroned

We see Rita yelling at Goldar about Oysterizer not destroying the Power Rangers the episode before. "It's all your fault!" yelled Rita. "What are you talking about I didn't pick that guy to send out there!" said Goldar. Squatt and Baboo are in the background covering their ears. Finster approaches Rita and Goldar and interupts the two. "Rita, I have a new monster that would take out the Dinozords." said Finster. "See there, he's the one who makes the monsters, not me." continued Goldar.

A sudden "moonquake" begins. "Whoa," yelled Rita, "What's going on?" "Yes! Yes! It's Lord Zedd!." yelled Goldar. "What? Why now? I haven't finished what I was told to do." said Rita. "I'm going to his chamber to greet him." said Goldar. Goldar runs to the chamber to see what's going on. Rita, Squatt, Baboo, and Finster follow. When they get to the chamber they see a chair in the middle of the room. Squatt, Baboo, and Finster run behind a wall. They look through the peep holes.

The chair turns and they see Lord Zedd sitting in it. "Lord Zedd," said Rita, "Why are you here? I haven't finished the Power Rangers yet." "That's why I'm here, Rita," said Zedd. "I'm here to finish what you could not." Goldar walks up to Zedd. "My lord." said Goldar. "Goldar, I see that you have been by Rita's side to whole time." said Zedd. "Yeah," said Goldar looking back at Rita, "But I will serve you first my lord." "What?" said Rita.

Zedd gets up. "Rita, if I'm going to finish the Power Rangers, then you will have to go." said Zedd. "No." said Rita. "Shut up!" yelled Zedd. Zedd using his staff to make Rita smaller. He walks up to her and picks her up. Two Puddies with a space dumpster walk up to Zedd and he puts Rita in it. "Now, I will send you off." said Zedd. The Puddies throw the space dumpster out into space.

"Oh man." said Baboo to Squatt. Finster walks from behind the wall but Baboo and Squatt stay.

"Lord, how will I assist you?." asked Finster. Zedd walks up to Finster and Finster bows to his knee. "You are the Finster, right?" asked Zedd. "Yes, lord." said Finster. "I will use you the same as Rita did. Go make some Puddies for me." said Zedd. "Yes." said Finster. Finster runs back to his workshop.

"Goldar!" yelled Zedd. Goldar runs up to Zedd and bows down. "Yes, lord." said Goldar. "Since you will serve me again, I will give you back what old Zordon took away from you." said Zedd. "My wings, lord?" asked Goldar. "Yes." said Zedd. Zedd takes his staff and places it on Goldar, Goldar's wings appear on his back. Goldar gives up and they walk up to the balcony. "Now I will have those Power Ranger destroyed once and for all!" yelled Zedd.

Jason and Tommy are at the Angel Grove Youth Center. Suddenly Kimberly runs into the Youth Center and up to Jason and Tommy. "We need to get to the hospital." said Kimberly. They run out of the Youth Center.

They arrive at Angel Grove Hospital. They see Trini and Billy talking to Zack, who has his head down, Zack's family is also there. "What's going on?" asked Jason. "Zack's mom has something wrong with her and needed to come to the hospital." answered Kimberly. Zack puts his head up and smiles at Jason, Kimberly and Tommy. "Hi, guys." said Zack. "Hey." said Tommy. The doctor comes out to talk to Zack's family.

"She's alright for the time being." told the doctor to Zack's family. "That's good." said Billy to Zack. "Yeah." said Zack. Their communicators go off. They go to an area of the hospital where no one is around. "Yeah." said Jason. "Teleport to the Command Center, we got something to tell you guys." said Alpha. "Stay there Zack, you need to be with your family" said Zordon. "Ok, Zordon." said Zack. The Rangers look at Zack and they shake their head at him and he does the same to them. They run out of the hospital and teleport.

They get to the Command Center. "Hey, what's going on?" asked Tommy. The Rangers walk up to Zordon. "Behold the Viewing Globe." said Zordon. The Rangers walk up to the Viewing Globe, they see Lord Zedd watching Finster mold a new kind of Puddies. "Who is this guy?" asked Trini. "His name is Lord Zedd", answered Zordon, "He was the master of Rita. He left, giving Rita the power to take over. But she took too long and now he back to finish what Rita began."

The Rangers look back at Zordon. "What about Rita?" asked Billy. "Yeah, what happened to her?" asked Trini. "He put her in another space dumster and had Puddies throw her into space." answered Zordon. The alarm goes off. "Ai yi yi yi yi!" said Alpha.

The Rangers go back to look at the Viewing Globe, they see Puddies, with shields on their chest, and a monster, which looks like a big magnet, terrorizing the city. "Lord Zedd has sent out one of his monsters and his Puddies to disturb the city." said Zordon. "We got to get out there," said Jason, "It's morphing time!"

DRAGONZORD!

PTERODACTYL!

TRICERATOPS!

SABERTOOTH TIGER!

TYRANNOSAURUS!

The Power Rangers get to the monster and the Puddies. Suddenly the bunch of Puddies start fighting the Power Rangers. Billy, Trini, and Kimberly begin to fight the Puddies. Jason and Tommy fight the monster. Trini gets a hold of one of the Puddies and punches the large Z on its chest. When she does that, the Puddie breaks apart and disappears. "Punch the Z on their chest!" yelled Trini. "What?" said Kimberly. A Puddie comes up to Kimberly and she punchs the Z. "Huh." said Billy.

Jason and Tommy continue to fight the monster. When the others are finished with the Puddies, they help Jason and Tommy.

They break away from the monster. "Zedd! I need more help!" yelled the monster. We see Lord Zedd in his chair. He then gets up to look out at Earth. "Magneton, grow!" He then rises out his staff and a electrical beam comes out and hits Magneton. Magneton grows.

"How are we going to defeat Magneton with the Megazord without Zack controlling the Mastodon Dinozord?" said Kimberly. "We're going to have to use our combined powers to fight him without the Megazord." said Jason. "Right," yelled the Power Rangers, they raise their hands to the sky. "We need Dinozord Power now!"

The Pterodactyl, Triceratops, Sabertooth Tiger, and Tyrannosaurus come out of their hidding places. Tommy then calls for the Dragonzord with the Dragon Dagger. The Dragonzord comes out of the sea. The Rangers jump into their zords.

"We need to attack him at the same time!" said Jason. "Right!" said the Power Rangers. They begin to use their combined powers to attack Magneton but it doesn't work. Then Magneton jumps up and down and a force of energy goes through the ground to blow the zords back. "You guys are funny," said Magneton, "Now I will use my magnet powers to take away your Power Coins!"

A magnet force, with colors of each the Power Rangers, comes through his body and out of his rised hands. The force takes the Power Coins to Magneton's hand. The Power Rangers try to fight it but, they can't. Zack, still at the hospital, doesn't notice the force taking away his Power Coin.

The Power Rangers, demorphed, fall out of their Dinozords and onto the ground. "What's going on?" said Trini. "The Dinozords rejected us because we don't have the Power Coins with us." said Billy. Magneton laughs. "Stupid Power Rangers." said Magneton. He teleports back to the moon palace. "No, what do we do without our Power Coins?" yelled Jason.

Magneton gets to the palace, Zedd is sitting in his chair with Goldar are standing next to him. Magneton approaches Zedd. Zedd takes the coins and gets up. He walks up to a table. It has six pure black Power Morphers that have nothing on where the usual Power Morphers have "Power Rangers" on them. He puts the Power Coins in the morphers.

"Now I will use the Power Coins and for evil." said Zedd while putting the Power Coins in the morphers. "Yes!" yelled Mageton and Goldar. Zedd walks up to the balcony and looks out the earth. "I got you now, Power Rangers. I will take over!" yelled Zedd. Magneton and Goldar walk to the sides of Zedd and they start laughing.

TO BE CONTINUED...

[PHAETON]

keep it comming

[havemercy]

Cool! You've rewritten Mutiny into a piece of crap story that needs to go to the hospital as bad as Zack's mom by the look of things.


*throws oranges at Mexican Ranger*

[TheTrueParty]

i think its called "putty/putties" not "puddies", also when you mention an action that transpired you dont need to repeat it in the next line, its redudant and slows down the flow of the story, i do like the idea of Zedd grabbin the DINO coins and the dragonzord coin as his first order of bussiness, just proving hes a bigger badass then rita could hope to be,

am i right in assuming this is gonna evolve into where the teens get Dairanger Zords/Costumes/Powers?

[Mexican Ranger]

Mighty Morphin Power Rangers: Thunder Warriors

Episode 2 The Thunder Gods

We see the Power Rangers on the ground with their Dinozords around them. Jason looks up at his Tyrannosaus Dinozord. Tommy gets up and picks up Kimberly. "How did he do that?" asked Kimberly. "He used his magnet force to take our Power Coins," said Billy, "I bet he even got the Mastodon Power Coin without Zack knowing what's going on."

The rest of the Power Rangers Rangers get up. "What are we going to do without our Power Coins?" asked Trini. "How are we going to enter the Command Center?" asked Tommy. Their communicators go off, they answer them. "Yeah." answered Jason. "Power Rangers," said Alpha, "I have altered the computers to allow you to enter the Command Center. Just teleport using using your communicators." "Okay." said Jason.

Back at the chamber, we see six Putties standing in front of Lord Zedd, Goldar, Finster and Magneton. "I made these Putties have the ability to use the Power Coins for evil, Lord Zedd," said Finster, "They are the best ones I ever made." "Good. Puddies, you have been chosen to be my new evil Power Rangers." said Zedd. He gives each Putty a morpher. Squatt and Baboo are still behind the wall watching what is going on. "Evil Power Rangers?" said Squatt. "Rita never thought of that." said Baboo. Squatt hits Baboo. "It's because Lord Zedd is a better at what he does than Rita". said Squatt.

Each Putty holds their morpher in the air and they morph into the evil Power Rangers. Their suits look just like the good Power Rangers but everyone things that was white is black on their suit and they have a Z in the middle diamond and the evil Green Ranger doesn't have a shield. "Go evil Power Rangers," commanded Zedd, "Use the Dinozords to take over Earth!" The evil Power Rangers nodded and teleport. Zedd turns to the other three. "Magneton. Goldar," said Zedd. "Be prepared just in case one of them get their Power Coins taken away from them." "Yes." said Magneton and Goldar. "Finster," said Zedd, "Go back to your workshop until I need you again." Finster leaves without saying anything.

When the Power Rangers get to the Command Center, Alpha is working on the computers. "Hey, what's going on?" asked Jason. Zordon appears. "Lord Zedd has taken away your Power Coins and gave them to six special Puddies that Finster made. The Putties used the Power Coins to morph and are using the Dinozords to try to take over the earth." said Zordon. "How are we going to stop them?" asked Billy.

We see the Dinozords destroying Angel Grove. Everyone is running away as building fall to the power of the Evil Rangers. "Ah." said evil Red Ranger. "Hahahaha." said evil Blue Ranger. Lord Zedd watches with his enhanced sight, Magneton and Goldar are using Rita's old telescope. "Yeah!" yelled Goldar. "Alright!" yelled Magneton. "We got those Power Rangers now!" yelled Goldar. Squatt and Baboo are also celebrating, even though they can't see what's going on.

Now we see Zordon beginning to explain how they will stop the evil Power Rangers. "Back 6050 years ago, there were warriors just like yourself, that used the auras of the five Thunder Gods to transform into the Thunder Rangers and fight evil doing. They also had battles with beings like Zedd and Rita. When they got older and couldn't fight anymore, I made the Power Coins to give to others, that couldn't control the auras of the five Thunder Lords to fight evil. When they did stop fighting evil, I kept their morphers, thinking that one day I may need to use them if my Power Coins were taken away or weren't strong enough to fight the villains." said Zordon.

Alpha comes from the back with a case holding the new morphers. The Rangers turn around and see Alpha with the case. "I present to you, the Thunder Aura Morphers." said Alpha. Each Ranger took a Thunder Aura Morpher from the case, each morpher consists of two devices that you put on each wrist. "Now put on your Thunder Morphers." said Zordon.

Each Ranger adjust their morphers on each of their wrists, when each Ranger finish putting the morpher on their wrists a source of energy goes through their body. "When are in need of your powers, just yell "It's morphing time!" and the ring rod on your right wrist will extend and then insert the ring into your left wrist device," said Zordon, "You will transform into the Thunder Rangers by calling out for the auras of the Thunder Gods."

The evil Power Rangers continue to destroy everything in sight, they are getting close to Angel Grove Hospital. Zack hears what is going on outside and goes out of the hospital to see what's going on.

He sees the Mastodon Dinozord freezing everything in front of it. "What's going on?" Zack asked to himself. He runs back in to the building to see if his family is okay. When he sees they are alright, he runs back out. "It's morphing time!" yelled Zack. He reaches for his morpher and puts it out infront of him, just like if he was morphinh. "Mastodon!" Nothing happens, he looks puzzled. Then he looks at his morpher and sees that his Mastodon Power Coin is not in there. "What?" said Zack.

Back at the Command Center, the alarm goes off. The Rangers run to the Viewing Globe, they see the Mastodon Dinozord freezing everything in front of it. Then they see that it is near Zack and the hospital. "It's going to freeze Zack and the hospital." said Trini. "Zack can't morph neither." said Billy. "We got go help him." said Jason. "You guys now have the power to take on the evil Power Rangers." said Zordon. The Rangers nodded at him.

"It's morphing time!" yelled Jason. The ring rods on their right hand device extend and they insert it in their left hand device. In their morphing sequence, instead of having the morpher around them its just five stars, one of each Thunder Ranger color.

(Kimberly) AURA OF THE PHOENIX!

(Trini) AURA OF THE GRIFFEN!

(Billy) AURA OF THE UNICORN!

(Tommy) AURA OF THE LION!

(Jason) AURA OF THE DRAGON!

The Thunder Rangers pose outstand of the Commander Center. "Hey!" yelled Tommy. "Now go help Zack using the Thunder Ranger powers." said Zordon on their communicators. "Right!" yelled the Thunder Rangers. The Thunder Rangers teleport near the hospital.

Zack is still out looking at what the Mastodon Dinozord is doing. It gets right in front of Zack. "Ah." said the evil Black Ranger. "What are you doing?" asked Zack. The Mastodon Dinozord looks like it's about to freeze Zack when Tommy jumps Zack and takes him to further from the Mastodon Dinozord. "Whoa, who are you?" Zack asked, confused. Tommy just looks at him and catches up with the Thunder Rangers, who are up to the Mastdon Dinozord.

"Stop, it evil Black Ranger!" commands Jason. "Ah." said evil Black Ranger. "How are we going to get him out of the Mastodon Dinozord?" asked Kimberly. "Yeah, we don't have the Power Coins to enter." said Tommy. "I have altered the Dinozords computers in the Command Center to make sure we could enter the Dinozords." said Billy. "Okay," said Jason, "I'll get the evil Black Ranger out of the Mastodon Dinozord. Jason jumps onto the Mastodon Dinozord and enters it. "Ah." said the evil Black Ranger to Jason. He takes the evil Black Ranger and throws him out of the Mastodon Dinozord. The Thunder Rangers and Zack watch what happens. Zack see the evil Black Ranger. "What? Is that the Black Ranger? Wait, that's me." said Zack to myself.

The evil Black Ranger lands on the ground in front of the Thunder Rangers, Jason jumps out of the Mastodon Dinozord and lands next to the other Thunder Rangers. The evil Black Ranger gets up and tries to fight the Blue Thunder Rangers but Tommy grabs him and pushes him back. Jason runs up to him and takes the Mastodon Power Coin out of the morpher. The evil Black Ranger demorphes back into it's Puttie form, Jason punches the Z. Zack is confused while watching what's going on.

Back at the moon palace, Zedd, Goldar, and Magneton are watching what is going on also. Zedd is real upset and turns red. "Those stupid Power Rangers!" yelled Zedd. "You mean Thunder Rangers." said Goldar. Zedd goes up to Goldar and hits him. "Shut up," yelled Zedd, "There are still the other five evil Power Rangers!" "Lord," said Magneton, "I will go assist the other evil Power Rangers." "Yes." said Zedd.

The Thunder Rangers go up to Zack and give him the Mastodon Power Coin. "The Mastodon Power Coin?" said Zack. "Yeah." said Jason. "Jason?" asked Zack, confused. Jason takes off his helmet. "Yep," said Jason, "We'll explain later. You need to help us by morphing into the Black Power Ranger." Zack nods at Jason. "It's morphing time!" yelled Zack.

MASTODON!

The Rangers run up to the rest of the Dinozords. "Okay, Puddies, we're here to take back the Power Coins!" yells Jason. "Ah." said the evil Red Ranger, looking at the Thunder Ranger and the Black Power Ranger. The evil Power Rangers jump out of the Dinozords. Magneton walks up to the side of the evil Green Ranger. "What is this, huh?" said Magneton.

"We are the Thunder Rangers!" yelled Jason. "I fight with the aura of the Phoenix, I'm the Pink Thunder Ranger!" yelled Kimberly. "I fight with the aura of the Griffen, I'm the Yellow Thunder Ranger!" yelled Trini. "I fight with the aura of the Unicorn, I'm the Blue Thunder Ranger!" yelled Billy. "I fight with the aura of the Lion, I'm the Green Thunder Ranger!" yelled Tommy. "I fight with the aura of the Dragon, I'm the Red Thunder Ranger!" yelled Jason. "And I'm the Black Power Ranger!" yelled Zack. The Thunder Rangers and Black Power Ranger pose.

"That's enough," yelled Magneton, "Come on evil Power Rangers! Let's take out the Thunder Rangers!" "Ah!" yelled the evil Thunder Rangers. The evil Power Rangers and Magneton charge the Thunder Rangers and Zack.

TO BE CONTINUED...

LOL, I love you havemercy. I had to get Zack out of the way when they got the new powers and for some of the first episodes. I plan on him appearing as the Black Power Ranger helping them and then he'll return full time. I can't believe I messed up the Putty name that much. I had to change it twice in this story before posting.

[havemercy]

Dude, seriously, this is awful stuff. Stop it before I call the cops for wreckless sucking.

[Mexican Ranger]

lol, ok, i was just doing it for my entertainment to see what might of happened if they got the Dairanger suits, etc and decided to post it

[Angelfox]

WAY to go Mexico...this is very entertaining..has for havemercy....that bonehead is just here to play with himself...dont take what he says to heart...your fic is pretty good...could use some tweakin ya...but good..i hope to see lots more of this

[TSoldier]

Cool! You've rewritten Mutiny into a piece of crap story that needs to go to the hospital as bad as Zack's mom by the look of things.


*throws oranges at Mexican Ranger*
Is it just me or have you gotten lovelier over time?
Mighty Morphin Power Rangers: Thunder Warriors

Episode 1 Dethroned
Can I ask how old you are? Just curious. Your story is precocious and seems like the prodcut of an equally precocious youth and it took me back; it sounded like something I might’ve wrote back when MMPR originally aired. I don’t mean that in a bad way. It’s actually pretty good and has a lot of potential. More so, in fact, than I’ve seen from most other fics I’ve read here (at least that I can currently remember). The problems here in your story seem to be a result of a lack of a more complete education in writing which, like with your fic, I don't always equate with a story being bad. The problems your story has are almost all in it’s telling. Like how you tell the story, rather than the story you’re telling. But format is weird here. Having multiple people talking in the same paragraph is weird, too, along with all the (i.e. too much) "he said/she said/Zack said/Kim said" stuff. There may be more creative ways to present a characters dialogue.

On the subject of dialogue, in this story it is a little simplistic, as it tended to be in the show, but with having changed the events of Lord Zedd’s arrival from coinciding with the ATV race to coinciding with Zack’s mother’s admission into the hospital, you've shown a leaning towards making your story more...mature, I guess. In keeping with that, I think it’d fit better to try and…’escalate’ (for lack of a better term) the dialogue. As far as superhero stories go, especially Power Rangers, there’s always a lot of the “Let’s do this!” kinda talk, and from the monsters, the ”Now I will get you my pretty! HAHAHA!” kind of thing, but I think you could enhance the story more with better, more involved dialogue.

Conceptually, the story's great. I like the idea of the magnet monster taking the Ranger’s coins and I really like detail about the Zords rejecting their pilots as a result of the missing coins. Definitely a lot more inventive than the way it was done in the show (with the Zord’s being frozen by Pirhantis Head and the writer's treating it like "that's that"). I mean, it was pretty nefarious for Zedd to have his monster feeze the Zords and, on top of that, use them against the Ranger's, but why not all of them? They just used the Dragonzord and Tyrannosaurus and left the others in limbo. The way you have the Ranger's losing control of their Zord's is better than they did it in the show. I think once you work on finding a better and more detailed way to present your ideas for the story, along with the things that take place in it, you'll find you'll have better achieved whatever your goal was in rewriting "The Mutiny" and the product you turn out will be more satisfying.

I do have another question, though. Is your magnet monster the same as the one from the show (I can't remember it's name)?

[havemercy]

Is it just me or have you gotten lovelier over time?


<george>What you think?</george>

[Solar-Lion Ranger]

This is really really good. Can't wait for the next part.

[PHAETON]

I do have another question, though. Is your magnet monster the same as the one from the show (I can't remember it's name)?


Actually the one in the Actuall series name was Magnet Brain...I don't know If it's the same one though...

Anyways Episode Thunder Gods was pretty damn Good(I definatley like Tommy as the Green Lion Ranger). I really was expecting much more of a fight scene between the Thunder Rangers and Zedd's Evil ones btw(Rita had several sets of evil Power Rangers, One being a set created by the evil Twin Man and the Other the infamous Mutant Rangers, who she created only a few episodes before the Mutiny).

The History behind the Thunder Aura's powers was Interesting...I hope we get a chance to delve into Zedd & Rita's battles with the Old Thunder Gods btw(.Rita was Imprisoned and Zordon was transformed into an interdimensional Being 10,000 years ago)...

With the entire ATV, Zack mother being in the hospital in alll...I still think this Universe should really branch from His Mother having a stroke or whatever ails here... Show the Rangers ready to participate in the ATV Tournament when Kim and Trini hurry to tell them the bad news. I also would like to see Zack's angst at his mother sickness and a possibly Zedd planning on making him his heir to his throne like he did Tommy in the Originial universe

[Mexican Ranger]

Ok. The Magneton thing, I just was thinking about a monster that would have the ability to take the Power Coins from the Power Rangers a magnet came to mind LOL, never thought about the other monster. I change the thing about the Thunder Gods fighting against Zedd and Rita (I put "beings like Zedd and Rita"). I wasn't thinking about the thing with Tommy and Zedd. I just had to keep Zack away when the others got the Thunder Aura Morphers, because I didn't want to bring in the 6th Thunder Ranger (I don't know what I'm going to call him) right away, so I guess that gives away what I'm going to do with Zack later on. The battle is going to happen in the next episode and maybe continue to the 4th episode (still working on how I'm going to do it).

[Mexican Ranger]

I'm still working on episode 3 and decided to change the name to Aura Taskforce Thunder Rangers. I'll probably post it tomorrow or Friday...

[CrudeSword]

well I guess you have a better story than the one I wrote
yours is more detailed