PDA

View Full Version : Operation: Blue Destroyer


nickraman
03-24-2006, 02:36 PM
This was intended to be from MMPR-SPD, but I had shelved it because I really didn't like my story, so I started the MF/SPD team-up, which WILL be done during spring break.

But this couldn't have happened, if it werent't to Shoichi's "Fanfic TokuAsia Festival" IMO was a great idea. This inspired me to go back to my original Forever Blue one and rewrite it as it were in a TOEI movie style (If you watched the DBZ movies either dubbed and subbed, you'd know what I mean...)

So this is ONLY a part. I have yet to get more done in the next 2 months, so enjoy this one for now, cause you probably won't see another part till Memorial day, due to state testing and school...but otherwise, take a breather and do post comments, criticism, suggestions, anything USEFUL. This takes from MMPR-MF...
----------------------------------------------------------------
*The logo for JETIX pops up with a black background. The screen fades to black, cueing the next scene…

We are brought out to the satellite viewage of Planet Earth, where the narrator begins his prologue.

“Do you all know? THIS IS THE BEAUTIFUL BLUE EARTH WE ALL LIVE ON. BUT ONE DAY, OUR BEAUTIFUL EARTH WAS TAKEN OVER BY EVIL DANGEROUS BEINGS THAT TRIED TO DESTROY ITS BEAUTY AND PRECENSE. BUT DON’T WORRY, THEN CAME 5 SUPERBEINGS CALLED “POWER RANGERS” WHO PROTECTED EARTH AT ALL COSTS, EVEN IF IT MEANT, GIVING UP THEIR LIVES. FOR MANY YEARS NOW, A NEW GENERATION OF RANGERS WOULD TAKE OVER THE RETIRED TEAM AND CONTINUE THE LEGACY. WHAT YOU WILL WATCH TODAY WILL CONSIST OF CURRENT RANGERS FIGHTING ALONGSIDE WITH THE VETRAN RANGERS TO DEFEND EARTH AGAINST AN OLD NEMISIS, BY THE NAME OF DARK SPECTOR! NOW THEIR FATE LIES AMONG THEM…” says the Narrator.

The Narrator’s voice fades away as we are moving on to the Planet Electros, where we see 3 fearsome warriors: Shadex, whose body’s colored in grey and red, Jadex, whose body’s colored in orange/tangerish, and Zapdex, whose body’s colored in a mix of Red and gold. Each of the warriors, are given equal screen time of them walking towards the planet’s crater. A dialogue ensures…

“There it is!” said Shadex, the leader of the group. “After several years and months of searching, we’ve at last found the perfect revival spot!”

“But, boss” said Zapdex, “How do we revive Him?

“With this” says the almighty and proud, Jadex. “Stand back.”

Jadex takes out a somewhat machine-type ray shooter that is very appealing to Shadex and Zapdex.

“Yes, the Reverse ray!” said Shadex. “This will reverse the effects of the late Zordon!”

Zapdex interrupts, “Wait. Wasn’t that wave, so powerful, it cremated those who were pure of evil and reformed those, who were under the spell of sorts?”

Jadex answers,” Yes you dumb bolt!” “It did so like you mentioned, but it did not affect to those who serve King Lexion. “I can’t really explain it, but that’s the way, I was told.”

“If you two are done wasting time, I’d love to get Him revived as soon as possible!” barked Shadex.

“SORRY BOSS!” said Zapdex and Jadex, simultaneously.

With that being said, the Shadex-3 set-up their ray of revival, while a certain ranger…is watching upon them. It appears to be an Aquitan, but’ let’s watch closely.

“Impossible!” cried the blue-warrior. “This must be stopped!”

The Revival ray has completed the set

“The ray is all set to go!” said Jadex. Shadex replied, “Don’t just stand there, fire it now! Man, of all the commanders aside, I had to be with you two Neanderthals!”

Zapdex replies, “Boss, it won’t happen again!”

“Okay, activating the revival ray!” Jadex says.

The ray fires towards the sky, in a time warp sort of way, but not relatively close. The Shadex-3 seem very enthusiastic and excited about their world domination plans, but from the view of the Aquitan, it looks like doom has returned to the universe.

After several minutes, the ray disappears and a glowing-like amber ball falls in the lava-like crater. Within a millisecond, out comes loads of lava jumping right out of the crater. This scares the Shadex-3, but what surprises them the most is the revived evil…DARK SPECTOR.

With a sound of a mighty roar, Dark Spector chants as his relief of revival, satisfies himself. The Shadex-3, approach with caution.

“Greetings!” said Shadex. “We are the Shadex-3, you’re revivers!”

“Revivers?!” yelled Dark Spector. “What do you mean? Was I gone that long?”

“Yes” replied Zapdex with fear. “You-u see-e we-e u-uh we-el uh-h ju-ust.”

“SPEAK UP!” echoed Dark Spector. This scares Zapdex that he hides behind Jadex.

“Scaredy Cat!” teased Jadex. He looks upon Dark Spector and replies, “We used the technology provided by our great King Lexion, who wishes you well and hopes of destroying Earth for us.

“EARTH?” yelled Dark Spector. “But I’m no match for the Power Rangers. How am I supposed to destroy Earth if I cannot defeat Earth’s greatest defenders?!”

“That is where we come in! Interrupted Shadex. You see…

Shadex explains his master plan of dominance to Dark Spector, while the Aquitan watches in fear and agony.

“I will not stand for this!” He takes an unknown object while the camera cuts back to the Shadex finishing up on this plan.

“And that’s how we’ll win!” said, Shadex.

Dark Spector looks in interest and takes a ponder at what is final verdict shall be, that is until lasers appear to fire on the ground.

“Augh!” shouts Shadex. “Who dares envies us!” Show yourself!

From a distant cliff in the background of the planet’s moons, reveals the BLUE ALIEN RANGER.

“The plan stops here!” says Cestro, the blue alien ranger.

In rage, Cestro jumps of the moon and charges towards the Shadex-3. Shadex motions Jadex.

“Take him.” Shadex says. “Don’t let him ruin our plans!”

“Yes sir!” Jadex replies. As Cestro appears to be flies towards Jadex, Jadex prepares a blast from his right hand. A camera shot of his eyes are shown, like all samurai movies.

“Steady….Steady.” murmurs Jadex. “Now!”

Jadex fires a powerful ki blast that flies in the opposite direction of Cestro. The result ends up in an explosion. Jadex smiles in victory, but finds that the ranger appears not in death.

“The hell!” exclaims Jadex. “Where did he go!”

“Right here!” claims Cestro.

Jadex slowly turns around to find Cestro in the sky in shock.

“No way!” shouts Jadex. “How could he—! “

Cestro slams Jadex, sending him through several planetary craters. Shadex looks in confidence, thinking that it was beginners’ luck.

“The fool was weak.” exclaims Shadex. “He obviously didn’t use his power scanner.” Shadex turns to Cestro, who’s is facing him in the opposite direction. Shadex activates his power scanner and grins at the results.

“Power level 3 huh?” Shadex replies. “This one’s not really much of a challenge.”

“Pity though” barks Cestro. “It’s going take more than a piece of scrap metal to defeat you!”

“Why you fiend!” screams Zapdex. Zapdex dashes towards Cestro and fires tons of ki blasts, but Cestro dodges in anticipation and kicks Zapdex in the gut, laying him on the ground.

“Idiot!” cries Shadex. “You apparently didn’t have enough training as Jadex did.”

“I was a bad student.” Zapdex painfully says.

Cestro faces towards Shadex in vengeance.

“You’re next!” He cries.

“Oh how I pity thy self.” Shadex replies. Shadex takes out a plasma capsule and contains Dark Spector in it. He preserves it inside his armor.

“What do you plan on doing!” shouts Cestro.

“Oh nothing really, just annihilating the solar system for domination.” Shadex replies.

Cestro’s anger grows inside of his sweaty alien-like body. His emotions know no words to say at a time like this, except for kill, death and agony.

“Time to end this!” Cestro cries out. Cestro dashes in full speed towards Shadex and launches several kicks and punches he could at that limit.
“My my, his power level increases by a punch. Impressive.” Shadex had thought. “But I must end this silly game now.”

As Cestro prepared to fire his laser gun at Shadex, Shadex fires a homing ki ball at Cestro, damaging Cestro’s ranger form countless number of times. Not only Cestro feels pain, but he feels devastated and weak as he feels defeated by the mighty Shadex while he himself enjoys the blows and damage Cestro receives.

After the final blow, Cestro lays on the ground, activating an illuminating blue light, encompassing his body, which demorphs to his civilian form. Shadex walks up to the alien.

“How sad of you to waste my efforts.” says Shadex. “It’s a pity that you had such power. I could’ve destroyed you, if I wanted, but instead I’ll destroy this entire planet. Oh, and when you regain consciousness, go tell your puny rangers that we’re taking action on Earth, and there’s nothing you Power Rangers can do to stop us!” With that said, Shadex gives a light kick to Cestro and walks off towards the ship, where the injured Jadex is helping out Zapdex in recovery.

“When you fools are done licking your wounds, prepare the ship coordinates for Planet Earth.” Shadex commands. “Our time here is done.”

“Yes Sir!” replied Jadex and Zapdex, badly injured.

The Shadex-3’s ship hovers from the planet’s ground. Cestro appears to recover from his badly injured. He looks at the ship hovering from the ground.

“No-o! Don-n’t!” cries Cestro, in his weakened state.

“This planet’s history.” exclaims Shadex. Shadex raises his right hand to cause a breakstorm within the planet. The planet begins to experience an Earthquake kind of feeling as numerous numbers of cliffs, craters begin to fall apart and break apart. Within those things consist of the injured unmorphed Cestro, who observes the ship fly towards Earth at Lightspeed.

“…We…need…help!” cries Cestro as he teleports out of the planet. Once teleported, the camera zooms out of the planet, showing its disastrous outcome, total annihilation. The screen goes to white and then resumes back to outer space, where the planet once stood. A blue light sweeps by the screen to reveal the mystical title: “Operation: Blue destroyer.”

The screen changes to the cue title of “POWER RANGERS MYSTIC FORCE” for about 5 minutes, then it changes to some Magiranger sentai footage not used in its original opening. During the opening, there’s the BGM composed by Mark Menza, recycled OP from DBZ Movie 7. The credit goes as follows:

“Based off TOEI Company LTD’s “Super Sentai.”

Concept by: Saburo Yatsude

Background Score: Mark Menza

Guest Stars:
David Yost
Kareem Prince
Steve Cardenas

Blake Foster
Selwyn Ward
Archie Kao

Mike Chaturantabaut
Michael Copon
Philip Jeanmarie

Sally Martin
Jorgito Vargas Jr.
Kevin Duhaney
Chris Violette

Executive Producers: Bruce Kalish & Koichi Sakamoto

Producer: Sally Campbell

Teleplay & Direction by: Nickraman

The OP ends with all the 13 Blue rangers posing and Maddy joins in last, making the set complete.

havemercy
03-25-2006, 12:06 AM
Oh goodie. A grab bag fiction of various Ranger characters and villians that don't mesh at all. And credits at the end to boot. Yippie. Pass the salsa, nick!

Romanus
03-25-2006, 11:04 AM
looking forward to this

nickraman
03-26-2006, 10:57 AM
Thanks for the comments. Again, I really owe it to Shoichi, for bringing back a fic that was shelved last year into this year.

There's more coming...SPRING BREAK!

havemercy
03-26-2006, 05:47 PM
Thanks for the comments. Again, I really owe it to Shoichi, for bringing back a fic that was shelved last year into this year.

There's more coming...SPRING BREAK!


We're so lucky!!!! :rolleyes:

nickraman
03-26-2006, 05:59 PM
You seriously think this is good? I thought you were sarcastic for a minute...

havemercy
03-26-2006, 06:06 PM
:005:

nickraman
03-26-2006, 06:32 PM
No, I mean it...*serious look How is it?

havemercy
03-26-2006, 08:06 PM
IT'S AWFUL. You, like others I have called out, have no idea what story structure is. Did any of you pass the 8th grade? I dare you to take this to an English instructor for critiquing. I'd love to hear what they say about it.

nickraman
03-26-2006, 08:16 PM
IT'S AWFUL. You, like others I have called out, have no idea what story structure is. Did any of you pass the 8th grade? I dare you to take this to an English instructor for critiquing. I'd love to hear what they say about it.

I'm following these rules here: http://forums.henshinjustice.com/showthread.php?t=6898

And all my english teachers say it's wonderful. If I told you the plot already, that'd be taking away the surprise.

havemercy
03-26-2006, 09:08 PM
*The logo for JETIX pops up with a black background. The screen fades to black, cueing the next scene…


For starters ... WTF? This isn't Jetix or a tv show for the matter. I can't even take you seriously as a writer. Then you don't even let the reader get to know the characters, regardless if they are established from the tv series. You don't bring me into the setting, or the time period, or anything for the matter. If I didn't have other things in the mean time of checking this forum, I'd be more than glad to do more fleshed-out critiques, which I guarentee would be more thorough than the story itself, sadly enough.

Angelfox
03-26-2006, 09:30 PM
*The logo for JETIX pops up with a black background. The screen fades to black, cueing the next scene…


For starters ... WTF? This isn't Jetix or a tv show for the matter. I can't even take you seriously as a writer. Then you don't even let the reader get to know the characters, regardless if they are established from the tv series. You don't bring me into the setting, or the time period, or anything for the matter. If I didn't have other things in the mean time of checking this forum, I'd be more than glad to do more fleshed-out critiques, which I guarentee would be more thorough than the story itself, sadly enough.
And your WHO??? the english teacher??? an editor??? who exactly are you besides a dumbass that likes to get cheap thrills trashtalkin other people...i still havent seen any original work by you on the WEB anywhere??? seems to me your all mouth, how bout you do us all a favor and oh i dunno...go do something consturctive..or go cry behind your momma's skirt....

Angelfox
03-26-2006, 09:31 PM
I'm following these rules here: http://forums.henshinjustice.com/showthread.php?t=6898

And all my english teachers say it's wonderful. If I told you the plot already, that'd be taking away the surprise.
I'd say it needs work but he gets a B for effort...

nickraman
03-27-2006, 05:25 PM
It's supposed to be in movie format...geez.

But yeah, it needs work. Again, I'm toying with the idea