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Akumaranger
03-22-2006, 03:14 PM
Disclaimer: The Power Rangers are the property of Saban / Disney Entertainment. But Tonga, Emperor Demetrius, and other characters are mine.
Author's Notes: This is a rewrite, but if you have any suggestions as the story progress please contact me.



Power Rangers Heroes
By Shin Akuma Goki


Invasion (part 1)


------Mirioni, Three years ago...------

"Deviot you son of a bitch, let her go!"

"Why? It seems to me that she's in better care."

"...If you don't let her go I swear I'll--"

"What, you'll fire. Heh If I go she goes with me."

"!?..."

"You are just predictable as before."

"I'm giving one last warning Deviot."

"Hhmmmp, then fire away Red Ranger."

"...Fine!"

(BOOM!)

------Mirioni, now...------

Five years ago the space station Terra Venture crash-landed on Mirioni, causing many of the station's Inhibiters decided to live with natives of Mirioni in order to help create a colony. After a few years of building they finally come close to build the planet's first colony on Mirioni.

In the clear sunny day, near the planet's shores stood the station's old central dome being rebuilt by logs and old scrap metal left around in the dome, a large wooden bridge that was connected along the dome to the shores.

On the shoreline stood a young man holding a pair of sneakers in his hand, the man wore a pair of blue jeans and a red T-shirt. He felt the wind so calm he walked silently across the sand with the wind so soft he felt as if he was flying on the clouds it self.

The man stared out at the re-building dome trying remember a couple of joyful memories, but instead he remembered bad ones, the ones that make him feel empty, cold, and alone. At times he wished he was never their, he wished could have forget those memories, including HER. As he stopped he stands and wonders why she left?

"Hey Leo..." appeared a man in a blue GSA uniform.

"Hey Kai what's up?" he greeted.

"Where have you been?" he asked.

"Just going out for some air." Leo said.

"You've been acting strange in these past for months, everybody's been concern about you-."

(-BOOM!)

Suddenly flames bursts up deep within the nearby forest. "What the hell was that?" Kai wondered aloud.

"I don't know but it looks like it came from the forest come on." Leo leaded.

As they arrived to the scene they quickly spotted Galaxy Pink fighting off a small group of unknown monster soldiers. They were not like putties because their faces resembled that of a wild wolf and were much larger with a short iron laced helmet that was 14 inches long. They wore heavy chest plates; inside the plates was covered by layer of leather wile on the outside was steel pigeon-breasted corselet. They held a six foot pool with a crescent-shaped blade on the top while on the bottom was short spike

"Kai, are you ready?" He asked.

"Yeah let's do this." said Kai. "GO GALACTIC!" they said in unison they both transform into Galaxy Rangers, their uniforms consisted of silvery slim breast-plate that stopped at the abdomen and small shoulder guards. They quickly sprang into action to make quick work of the soldiers that surrounded their friend.

"Leo, Leo, thank god you're here." She said in a side of relief.

"Who are these guys?" he asked.

"I don't know? They just came out of nowhere and attacked me and Mike." She said.

"Where is Mike?" he asked.

"I don't know, we got separated when they attacked." She said.

"Leo get ready there are more coming." Kai said.

And Leo was right more did come. Leo went after the closet one near him gave the creature a close line. Then two more came right behind him as he quickly notice and gave them a backwards spin kick.

It was now Kai turn to have a go at them. Kai ducked the creature's attack and gave him a sidekick to the creature's head causing the creature to fall to the ground.

Kendrix couldn't let the guys do all the work. Kendrick jumped over one of the creatures and kicked him from behind. Then spin-kicked another one behind her. Out appeared a large one came at her with a sword. She used a cross-hand block and kicked the sword out of his hand and gave him a back-hand strike to the throat and drop kick him right in his face.

More appeared around the three as fought them off, Kai was quickly knocked back from behind as one of the soldiers swung his spear. Kendrix was quickly grabbed by a few soldiers and was thrown into the ground, while Leo took a spear into the chest and was easily thrown over to his friends. The soldiers quickly locked their weapons with the rangers who were quickly over powered; they struggled while trying recover from the recent blows.

"Things are not looking good for us." Kendrix said.

"I know let's just hope the others get here fast." said Leo.

"If we can survive this." said Kai.

Then suddenly a few blast from out of the air came and finished off the many soldiers. As the three looked up to see Damon and Maya appeared from the air in their ranger form took out the remaining soldiers.

"Kendrix, Leo, Kai. Are you okay?" Maya said.

"Were fine." said Kendrix.

As they turned Leo saw a figure appeared.

"Who's there, show you're self." Leo demanded.

As the figure answered the ranger and appeared they were shocked at what they were seeing.

"Who are you?" Kai asked.

"More like what are you?" Damon added. As they could see he was not human.

He was a 6.4 feet high a large mechanical elephant that wore a jacket of a heavy cord wrapped in leather, he horded in his left hand was a long axe; the axe was about 5 feet long, the head was large with a convex semi-circular edge pierced by a heart-shaped opening and an elaborate pan on the back.

"I am Tonga, and I am here for the Lights of Orion." the beast said.

As they looked behind him they saw a battered Mike on the ground.
"Mike!" Leo shouted.

"Hhmmm, I was sure that he was Galaxy Red. Well no matter, give me the Lights of Orion or parish." Tonga demanded

"Over our dead bodies." Damon said with great irritation.

Tonga quickly mowed down Kai and Damon down, while at the same time quickly countered Leo sword attacks. As he and Leo crossed swords he quickly counters it with a series of head butts. Leo quickly staggered back as Maya and Kendrix try to take Tonga out with a surprise Aerial strike but only to be caught from the air and thrown right into Kai and Damon as Tonga went back after Leo.

Leo quickly recovered from the head shots and return to fight Tonga again, as he quickly picked up his Quasar Saber and went into battle against the behemoth. Tonga proved to Leo how quick he can be by dogging every last one of Leo's sword slash and then gave Leo a back elbow to the side of his face and strike the ranger in the chest with his axe, as he quickly pinned Leo to the ground on his foot.

While struggling to rise, Leo felt a small puncture in his right leg. "Pathetic..." Tonga said as he raised his foot and kicked Leo in the ribs causing him to roll to the side.

"I'll say this one last time give me the lights of Orion or perished." He demanded once again.

As he walked over towards the rangers as he raised his axe until... "What!?" he shouted as vines had popped up from the ground and wrapped it selves around Tonga's body causing him to drop his axe, Kai and Damon quickly got up and strike Tonga behind his legs.

"Kendrix, Maya, NOW!" Leo yelled While Tonga broke free and raised himself, in the air was Kendrix and Maya greeted him with a few kicks in the chest that send him falling towards Leo who ends the chained attack with "Whirl Wind Kick" that finally sends the behemoth to a near tree.

"EVERY BODY READY!" he asked. "RIGHT! QUANTUM BLASTERS FIRE!" they said in unison. Five energy beams fired towards Tonga. Tonga quickly pulled up his hands as if he was going to block it. "AARRRGGGGHHHHH!" he yelled as he was engulfed into the flames.

"Is he dead?" Maya wondered.

"I hope so?" Damon replied.

------Somewhere...------

"Heh, I think it's time we show them you're full potential." said a mechanical voice as it pressed a few buttons into his keyboard.

------Mirioni...------

"Mike. Are you okay?" said Kendrix.

"Yeah I'm fine, just a scratch." He said.

"Heh-heh, come on let's get you back." Leo said.

"Aaaggghhh! I'm not finished yyyeeettt!" said a voice from the flames.

As they turned they shocked to see Tonga growing out from the flames.

"Oh come on!" said Damon.

"Everyone gets ready." said Leo.

"No more games, now you all die." He said as he raised his axe.

"I don't think so Galactabeasts arise!" Leo shouts.

Suddenly five large beams of energy appeared; as the light flashed away it was revealed that each beam formed a beast-like animal. As the beasts roared they all rushed forward into each other transforming into a large behemoth that was the protector of the planet.

"Galaxy Beast King!?" Tonga muttered.

As the behemoth rushed at them, they quickly pulled out the Galaxy King's saber and went to work on Tonga. Quickly they jumped over him as he turned he was greeted with a double slashes to the chest, then followed it with a dropped-kicked him in the face. Tonga quickly got back his feet and swing his Axe at the rangers, but was countered with a quick swipe the behemoth's axe to shatter in two and followed it with a power punch.

"Demonic Quake!" he shouted.

As he made a loud stomp that made seismic blasts that was heading towards the Galaxy Rangers.

"Now's our chance!" Leo shouted. They quickly jumped into the air nearly missing Tonga's tackled.

"WHAT!" Tonga said in shock.

The rangers quickly raised the zord's sword to perform: "Galaxy Beast King Cut" causing a large explosion. As the smoke cleared there stood Tonga with a bright red line trailed down to the middle of his body as sparks flew out from around his body.

"D-damn you, m-my e-emperor I' v-ve failed." He said as burst into flames.

The quickly rangers ejected themselves out of the megazords to help mike.

"Emperor, who is that?" Maya asked.

"I don't know?" Mike shrugged.

"Look!" Kendrix shouted.

The rangers looked up to see as five large falcon-like ships covered the sky.

"What the hell is going on here?" Leo asked.

"-Don't you'll know soon enough." said the Phantom Ranger as he appeared with Jara.

"Phantom, Jara? What's going on here?" Leo demanded.

"We can't explain it here but we must go to a safer place." Phantom said.

------Somewhere...------

Somewhere on a cold deserted planet stood a cloaked woman standing out into the icy winds. She stands there as if the raging winds were nothing to her.

She paused for a moment to quickly look over her shoulder, for an instant it was nothing. She cautiously turned her head back and continued to walk until six demonic soldiers risen out from the snow.
She quickly rolled out to avoid as three of the soldiers closed in on her like a hurling comet. She got up and pulled out her sword: The blade was 29 inches long, and was curved with a short steel hilt.

The three stood their ground while the other three slowly approached her with caution.

"Only six this time? Heh, this is very insulting." she smirked.

She quickly charged fourth at the three in front, jump-spin kicked the one in front but the attack was dodged the two behind him quickly strike at her with their swords. She manages to block but was fell on one knee by the swords impacts, she then notices the one from behind her as he was ready to pounce she kicked her leg up as the snow blinded the two in front of her, with the two distracted she countered the warrior from behind by a kneeing back flip to the gut. The warrior fell down hard as she cuts down the two in front of her.

As the first three fallen the other three quickly charged forth planning to kill her as she tried to recover, but their plan were quickly scraped as she began to slash the first of the second group in the mid-chest then diagonally across the body of the second. The third one quickly saw her easily disposed them both and decide to turn and run.

"They always under estimate me humph." she in disappointment.

She quickly grabbed one of the fallen warrior's swords and waited until the fearful soldier had ran enough, and with ease she flings the sword like a boomerang at him not stopping until it violently entered the side of the soldier's left head. The soldier stopped until suddenly, he fell over.

"My love, wait for me" she said as she continued to walk toward a large shark-shaped vessel in front of her...

------Meanwhile in space...------

A large fleet of small ships appeared roaring through space, many of these ships consist of Quadra fighters and Velocifighters being followed by the large falcon-like ships, while in the center was a large round golden ship.

Inside the golden ship was a large dark throne room there sat a young man with piercing red eyes was holding a glass of a bluish-green liquid, in front of the man stood a human-looking robot. "Ke'ris do you have any news from the frontline?" said the man on the throne chair.

"Yes Aquitar has fallen under our control; we also captured the people you requested."

"Good very good indeed, Deviot?"

Out of the shadows appear Deviot in a violet-white amour.

"I am sorry to say but Tonga has failed on Marioni, he was destroyed by-"

"-By the Galaxy Rangers." the creature interrupted.

"Yes. But before his destruction he had transmitted DNA from the red ranger." Deviot said.

"Excellent you may go now Deviot." said the creature.

"Yes, thank you Demon Emperor Demetrius."


To Be Continued . . .



Next: Invasion (Part 2)

ShadowRanger
03-23-2006, 04:49 AM
Thoughts? Yes, polls belong in the polls section, not in the fanfic forum

Angelfox
03-23-2006, 09:26 AM
Not bad, not bad at all...very intriguing

Akumaranger
03-23-2006, 09:50 AM
Disclaimer: Power Rangers is the property of Disney. Purple Astro Ranger, Hibora, Renee Juace, Zolabwa, Kenshiro Yamagawa, Jonathan Quartermain, Hargoro Kari and Lord Demetrius Oda are mine.

Power Rangers Heroes

By Shin Akuma Goki

Invasion part 2

------KO-35...------

The eagle-like ships fired upon the flame covered capital of KO-35, small pod-like ships shot up into the blackness of space. Above its surface the Space Rangers battled their invaders; they zipped around the sky as they fought the Quadra fighters and dodged the explosions that were fired upon them by the eagle-like ships.

"This is T.J. calling Astro three, is anyone there?"

"Ay-yi-yi, this is Alpha Six what’s the situation?"

"Not good Alpha, we're doing the best we can out hear. Have located the signal's origin?"

"Almost T.J. just give me and Alpha Seven, two more minutes."

"Alright but hurry!"

The rangers continued to fight off the Quadra fighters; suddenly Astro Silver and Astro Purple appeared to lend their hand into the fight.

"Karone, Zhane, have managed to help the citizens’ escape?" Andros asked as he zipped along them.

"We got as many as we could but not many made it!"

"...Alpha did find it?" Andros demanded.

"...Ummm, Yes we found it its Ay-yi-y--!" The signal was cut off.

"Alpha, are you there, Alpha!" Andros yelled.

"Andros LOOK!" Cassie shouted over the communicators.

They quickly looked down to see the Astro Megaship falling back into the planet in flames as the eagle-like ships focused their cannons on the falling Megaship, then suddenly a large round golden ship appeared before them.

"Alright, everyone look alive!" said T.J. as they prepare for a big showdown the golden ship suddenly fired upon them like a fiery rain storm.

"Everyone look--" the communication is cuts off...

------Marioni, two years ago...------

"So, you're going?"

"...Yes"

"Why, why not say here?"

"Because there is nothing for me here, you know that!"

"But you have me, is it because of him--"

"--No it's not like that, I told you before!"

"I'm sorry it's just that, I almost lost you and I don't want that to become reality."

"Leo...I must go out there, I have to find my own identity."

"I'm sorry Leo, goodbye and please forgive me."

------Now...------

The Eagle-shaped ships hovered above the planet as the ships foot soldiers scouted for the Galaxy Rangers. Meanwhile Deep within the forest the Galaxy Rangers hide from the ships and its foot soldiers as they await in a large area of small trees, in front of them was a large old tree waiting for Phantom to return.

While the other rangers quietly discussed their situation more it was the red ranger who sat there to himself thinking. It was always good to help when he would be frustrated by something, and it always tended to have him distracted from remembering HER. Suddenly the Phantom Ranger appears.

"Phantom how is Mike?" Kendrix asked with worry in her heart.

"He is in intensive care, he will be okay."

"Okay Phantom, I think it's time you start answering questions who's this mystery man that wants the lights?" demanded Damon.

"His name is Oda Demetrius, and he is the second son of late Emperor Dregan Oda." said a voice from the tree.

"?...who said that?" Damon asked.

As they quickly turned toward the old tree, which was now showing a pair of eyes.

"What the hell is that thing?" Kai pointed in shock.

"M-M-Moku!" Maya shouted as she quickly bowed her head down.

"Moku? Maya what is this thing?" Kendrix asked.

But Maya would just ignore it and continue bowing to the Large old tree.

"He is Moku the tree spirit Marioni, and mentor of the universe's great warriors." Jara said as he appeared.

"That is true but now I have returned once again to help anthor generation become this era's great warriors." Moku said as the Galaxy Rangers calmed.

"But before we begin your journey, it is best to tell you who your enemy is..."

------Somewhere in space...------

"Uhhh, where am I?"

His eyes slowly opened wide, and all he could see where six long green tubes each one with a friend from Aquitar.

"Cestria! Delphine! Aurico! Tideus! Cestro! Corcus!"

With the site of his friends and lover in captive he struggles’ only to find himself strapped down tightly.

"Ah I see you're awake, Mr. Cranston." said a smoothed gruntingly voice.

"Nnnggghh, who are you? And where am I?" he demanded.

"Sssshhh. Now I think it is best that you calm down, you are a guest here."

The Shadowed man step into the light to reveal himself to the blue ranger. He seemed young, but Billy dought it. The man had eerie blood-red eyes. With a tanish-color skin and wore a dark Blue-gold Kimono, a long violet-red cape with had familiar tribal markings along the edges of the cape and kimono.

"I am Demon Emperor Demetrius Oda of the Taru Empire, and you are going to be the key that will help me conquer this universe."

"I think again."

"Oh, is that so? Well I guess that means I'll have to make you see things my way, Deviot..."

Just then Deviot appeared.

"Yes my lord..."

"Have Mr. Cranston understand his options. I have a guest to see." He said as he walks of into the dark corridor.

Just then Billy sees Deviot holding a small handle drill, as he turns it on he points it towards the struggling Billy.

"Yes my lord, heh heh hahahaha..."

------The Phantom Ship...------

He lay in his bed battered and bruised, his body trying to keep still. He thinks about getting up but knows if he moved every bone in his body would break in a million pieces, so he lies back feeling so helpless to help his friends.

And his little brother...

Just then an old friend appeared to greet Mike.

"Michel..."

"Bull black?..."

"You can still help them."

"Help them? How do you suppose I do that, I can barely stand?"

"You weren’t afraid of death when you almost died trying to keep that portal open."

"...What can I do?" Mike pointed at his broken morpher.

"Heh, leave that to me..."

------Marioni...------

The rangers sit to listen the story of their new enemy.

"Seven-hundred years ago, five people from different cultures and countries came together, these people were: Renee Juace of France, Zolabwa of Zimbabwe, Kensaro of Triforia, Jonathan Quartermain of Great Brittan, and Hargoro Kari the son of a Japanese woman and a Spanish pirate. Together they have become the second wielders of the Quasar Sabers, they banded together to protect the universe from the fiend called: Emperor Eigma Oda."

"Who is the Eigma?" asked Damon.

"He was the older brother of Demetrius and first son Dregan Oda; Dregan was the emperor of the Tarus Empire."

"Tarus Empire?" Leo asked.

"An advanced feudal-like space empire that once dominated the universe at the dawn of time. When their father died at the hands of the first Wielders’ during the great millennium war. After the vanishing of the original wielders, Eigma took his chance to do what his father had failed to do, claim the Quasar Sabers. With many of that century greatest warriors occupied in the war, Zordon and I enlisted the aid of five new warriors of the Quasar Sabers to combat Eigma..."

------ Meanwhile in space...------

The throne room filled with soldiers as Dmitri sits awaiting for a special guest to arrive. "My lord, she is here." Ke'ris said as the door open.

Dmitri grinned as a tall woman appeared from the doorway. She was in a long white and gold cloak that covered her entire body even covering her eyes. As she walked by she brushly touched one of the soldiers causing him to shrivel up into dust, she continued to walk until she stopped to bow in front of the blood-eyes ruler.

"Ah I see Digaia elder daughter of Hexuba has arrived to greet me a visit I see."

"It is good to see you again Emperor."

"Please, you can call me Dmitri."

------Marioni...------

"After many years of battle they managed to defeat Eigma's Army and banished the empire into the lost galaxy."

"Interesting, but why hasn't this part of history been recorded before?" Kai asked.

"We all believed it would be best that no one was to know about the Quasar Sabers power." Phantom answered.

"We?" Kendrix puzzled.

"Because I am Kensaro second wielder of the Blue Quasar Saber." Phantom replied, as they all look at him in surprised.

"Phantom has already warned the Earths but unfortunately we couldn't warned Aquitar in time." Jara said.

"And what of KO-35?"

"Sadly, no word yet."

"Dimmit..."

"Rangers, as before you go I must give you something..." Moku said as a rose appeared in front of the rangers.

"Bokku awaken..."

Just then the rose bloomed revealing a small thumb-sized figure resting inside the rose. The figure wore a brown wooled vest and a long blue kilt; it had an acorn-shaped helmet on its head. It sit's itself up as it stretches’ out.

"What is it?" Kendrix wondered.

"Its name is Bokku, it is a forest fairy it will give information on the Tarus Empire when needed." Moku answered.

"And he's very helpful when you are in a tight situation." Phantom applied.

After a few minuets Bokku slowly recognized the Phantom's voice.

"Ken!" Bokku said as he zipped around his old friend.

"What happen to you?"

"Ha-ha don't worry about it, at least it is nice to see you too Bokku." chuckled Phantom.

"You know this little pint?" Kai squinted at Bokku.

"Pint! Who are you calling pint!" angered the tiny forest fairy as it gave a tiny spark hit Kai's nose as the rest of the rangers laughed.

Suddenly large sparks flown burst out into the sky, immediately telling the rangers that trouble in the colony.

"Tonga's reinforcements." Phantom exclaimed.

"Right let's go..." Leo ordered.

"We will look after mike."

"Thanks..."

"And remember rangers these battles will be much more fierce." Moku added.

The rangers nodded, and then quickly headed back to the colony.

Outside the open fields was the cloaked woman holding a small bag over her left shoulder.

/"Leo, I've returned."/

As the rangers returned to the village they saw the large creature holding a bystander by the throat. He was a heavy set creature with bronze skin with a face resembles of an ape. He wore a long black furry vest with two hunky-looking wrist bands.

While behind was the villagers’ chained to each other. The creature was accompany by a large group of the demonic soldiers that attacked earlier. With a bag over its head, it made the bystander unrecognizable to the Galaxy Rangers.

"He is Hebora second Captain of Emperor Demetrius army." Bokku whispered to the rangers.

"He's here for the Lights of Orion isn’t he?" Damon said.

"How wise of you, now give me the lights or I’ll kill these pathetic humans." Hebora interrupted. To show how serious he pulls of the from the bystander head to reveal to be...

"Mr. Stanton!" Kai shouted.

"Ah ah, come one step closer I’ll snap this little human’s neck like a twig. Just give up and do as I said." He said with a grin as he slowly began to crush his hand in around Stanton’s neck.

"Now do as I say or we will the villagers’ including this one."

"No Wait! We'll do whatever you want."

"Now that's a good little humans good first off, de-morph."

The rangers looked at each other with great anger within themselves as their fist clinched. Suddenly more demon soldiers appeared around the area blocking the rangers from escaping.

"Damn..." Kai muttered.

"De-morph, NOW!" He demanded.

In a quick flash they were in their GSO uniform, as two demon soldiers walked forward to collect their morphers. "Heh this is too easy." Hebora smiled.

But suddenly something had slashed Hebora in the arm; he dropped Stanton wile trying to realf himself from the sudden pain he received just then.

/"It's her..."/ Leo thought.

Flashes of light appeared around the villagers, as the rangers kicked the soldiers backwards into the ground. Suddenly the chains on the villagers’ were cut as the attacker appeared; it was the mysterious woman now sporting a long Violet-Green turban that covered her face. "Everyone get away from here now!" the woman yelled as the villagers carried Stanton to safety.

Explosions appeared from the sky; everyone quickly looked up to see the eagle-like ships being shot down from a far away ship. Just then the large ship appeared above them all, firing down upon the demon soldiers.

"Carrierzord!" Maya said with joy.

"You again, why do you always interfere with in our Emperor's affairs?" Hebora exclaimed.

"Because I can Leo morph now!" She signaled.

"Right, Go Galactic!"

They transformed into the galaxy rangers they wasted no time to use the Lights of Orion, as they charge at Hebora.

As the rangers fought Hebora, the woman took on the soldiers that surrounded her. She high kicks a soldier from behind as three more charged forth at her.

Hebora swifts-kicks Damon in the head, Kendrix thrusted forward but only to get close lined. Maya and Kai jumps in to doubled teamed him, Hebora back flipped himself over them as he spin-kicked them both down into the ground. Leo quickly swung his sword at him but Hebora managed to duck at the last moment to knee Leo in the gut, as he kneeled forward Hebora quickly fist-hammered him completely into the ground.

"Is that the best you can do?" grinned Hebora.

"No way, were just getting started." Leo said as he and the other rangers picked themselves up.

She steps backs as she counters the soldier’s swords attacks, she kicks forward toward the middle soldier. He flies back while she mid-slashes the one on the left and kicked the one on the right at the same as they both fell down. She notices one of the soldiers is attempting to attack from the air, quick reflexes she managed to jumped-kick the soldier in the face as he hit the ground hard.

Kendrix and Kai doubled knee-kicked Hebora in the chest, they where followed by Damon and Maya as they spin kicked in the same place. Leo then returned the favor be giving the whirled-wind kick Hebora in the face as he fell to the ground. As he rose the unleashed their full-force elemental blast as he quickly burst into flames.

------Demetrius throne room...------

"Hhmmm, another failed attempted well no matter." Demetrius said to himself as he watched the fight on a halo-monitor.

"My lord, I have some good news, we have just conquered KO-35. But we weren’t successful in capturing the three astro rangers as you requested." Deviot said as he ran into the throne room.

"Ah such a shame, and what of Mr. Cranston?"

"See for yourself."

Just the Billy appeared in a fully black Kimono, his eye lines were blacken as his eyes showed the same bloody-red eyes like Demetrius showed.

"How do you feel Mr. Cranston?"

"I feel hate... hate for the Power Rangers."

"And what are you going to do about it?"

"I'm going to kill them, kill them all"

Dmitri smiled.

------Marioni...------

Just as the rangers powered down the woman approached them.

"It's been awhile, hasten it?" the woman said as she greeted them.

"Yeah it's has in it" Maya said as she hugged the woman.

The woman turned toward Leo as he and her locked eyes. The woman removed the turban from her head, She has raven black hair, her eye pupils had two different colors on the left eye was dark green while the right eye was bright yellow, with a scar on her left check.

"Leo..."

"...Trakeena."

Next: Invasion part 3

Akumaranger
03-23-2006, 10:45 AM
Please tell me what you think?

And ShadowRanger, the reason why I put a poll up there was to know what other people think about my story.

havemercy
03-23-2006, 11:17 AM
hehehehe............ darn right awful. Rename this Power Rangers ZEROS.

Angelfox
03-23-2006, 04:10 PM
while some may not like this, htere are others who do..regardless this fic intruiges me..im curious to see where it goes....Trakeena and Leo??? thats pretty rare lol

Akumaranger
03-24-2006, 09:40 AM
Well If some you think this is god awful, then tell me what I should improve on storywise.

Note; I' m not trying to act like a jerk here so if I had managed to make anybody angry in the past, well then I sorry.

havemercy
03-24-2006, 11:15 PM
This is 99% dialogue. You're playing cyber-Barbie, my suckworthy peer. Write a fic instead.

FlashmanX
03-25-2006, 10:19 AM
wait havemercy is here giving advice!!!!!

dude you should take it after all he has so many fan fics of his own on the fan fic of the month awards. I mean hes won that thing like 6 times.

oh man havemercy can't wait to read your next chapter.

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Wait a min THERE ISN"T ANY

stop bitching about fic writing when you haven't even done your own. Lets see your work. Show us how a real fic is done. until we see that then shut the hell up and stop making fun of peoples work.

ShadowRanger
03-25-2006, 11:26 AM
Thing is I happen to agree with HaveMercy, this is pretty bad. If writing a script, then 90%+ of dialogue would have been passable; at least you could have justified it by claiming that it was up to those reading it to determine the actions and underlying emotions in the story. Even then the lack of description would have made it even less appealing than a normal script fic.

ZeoFury
03-25-2006, 05:24 PM
I'm intrigued cuz my name is Dimitri. =-)

Akumaranger
04-04-2006, 02:08 PM
I' ve just rewrote them, now tell me what you think?

roc da mic
07-03-2007, 08:03 AM
i like it