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Adam West
10-25-2004, 01:26 AM
Our priority was simple but demanding. : Assist in the stabilization of developed civilizations that appear to be driven by war.
[Slight chuckle] "Simple..."

We were the perfect peace keepers but all the even more perfect killers. Before I ever dawned this suit they showed me the history of nearly ever team of Rangers...when and which I came to the conculsion we were going to be nothing like them.

It was a violent power they implemented a new type of armor and assualt weapons Code named :" War Hammer" We first thought ' we're peace keepers we're there to restore order, was this overkill?'

But after our first assignment we understood why.

The full force of a planet again'st five young soldiers who represent it's suffering people.Our Ranger forms proved formidable but the overwhelming forces drove us to take it one step further.

"War Hammer Engage!"

We were transformed, our strength surpassing it normal limitations, our weapons pure destructive force entire squadrens subdued with the pull of a trigger. As the dust settled we bared witness to the pure carnage we laid to their forces I dropped to my knees that day trying to make sense of what i had just done. I looked to my side and saw alittle girl staring at me her mother behind her hands on her daughters shoulders.

She walked over.

I looked into her eyes.She spoke.Cradling a stuff animal between her arms.

"Thank you for saving ren and me and Mommy now we can see the sun when ever we want." She said smiling.

I managed somewhat of smile. "Yeah, you can."

From that moment as I stood up I knew this is what i need to do.

I'm Joseph Cruz Red Master Power Rangers Code "Storm Shield" This is Our Story...

[Author's summary]

A story of Five young warriors who will experience the fustrations of betrayal,team work and love as they try to restore order where there is none.

Author's notes: hey everybody I'm new to the whole Pr fanfics but I hope to do well let me know if the story sounds appealing at all.So I can continue.

BlueFireStorm
10-25-2004, 03:08 AM
Well I can say that I am definitely interested in reading more. I'l be looking forward to you posting more.

bushwacka666
10-25-2004, 05:24 AM
Well you might be new at writing PR fics, Adam West, but you're off to a great start - that promo had me quite hooked. Obviously you know how to write in order to keep the reader engaged.

As a friendly suggestion, may I say that your punctuation could do with a little work. But all in all you're doing a good job so far - keep it up! :)

Shoichi
10-25-2004, 08:41 AM
are you thinking of doing something like a soap opera blended with a ranger fic? if so, you have my fullest support, cos i'm doing something like that too, well if you do it well, it's going to be a blast for most of the people here!

Adam West
10-27-2004, 02:38 AM
http://hometown.aol.com/jcruz70012/myhomepage/prep.gif

Here's a first draft of what Red Master might look like I got the idea from differen't suits like green samurai ranger,Gold ranger,PRTM's thicker white ranger's suit. I dunno if I should stay with this one. This is "formal wear" at certian points during the story Storm sheild will be asked to attend certian occasions at which they'll need a bit more class to the suit thus the sash hanging past the torso there.

First chapters on its way and the rest of the suit designs /plus War hammer mode add on design also, and character descriptions. hope you guys can get into it.

Oh and thanks for the positive feedback everyone and shoichi to answer your question yes there will be a blend along those lines.