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GR Dragonzord
05-08-2004, 11:08 PM
“Dr.O we cant hold them off anymore what are we gonna do?” Conner cries out to Tommy.
“Hang in there guys I have a plan.” Tommy tells them all and takes turns the Brachio Staff to energy orb mode while they’re surrounded by tyrannodrones
“Well whatever it is now’s a good time for it to come into play Dr. O.” Ethan says with a fatigued voice.
“Yeah don’t worry. It’s coming. Follow me.” They fight there way out of the middle and begin to run. Tommy turns towards the tyrannodrones. “ ENERGY ORB ENGAGE!”The energy orb takes out all the tyrannodrones.
“Man why didn’t you do that before?” Ethan asks Tommy.
“Hey cut me some slack will ya?” Tommy says with a big sigh of relief.
“Nothing can make this day worse.” Kira says exhausted.
“I wouldn’t say that.” A voice says behind the rangers.
Tommy turns around. “Aww man not you.”
“Look Trent man we don’t wanna fight you anymore. You’re a ranger. Fight by our side. Break that spell.” Conner says trying to convince Trent to fight with them.
“You don’t have to fight me Red Ranger. I bought a friend for you to play with. Meet Wolfsbane.” Trent says with an evil laugh.
“What? I didn’t know you were working for Mesagog?” Kira says.
“I guess he made me an offer I couldn’t refuse. Wolfsbane attack!” Wolfsbane attacks the Rangers. Too exhausted to take him on Conner, Ethan, and Kira gets beaten easily leaving Tommy to fight the monster on his own, but the monster is too much for him.
Wolfsbane knocks Tommy away and Trent decides to finish him off. “White Dragozord laser arrows!” the arrows hit Tommy and knocks him back and powers him down.
“Dr.O are you ok?” The other fallen rangers run up to him and see how he is.
“That’s it! I’ve had enough of your crap Trent. Friend or no friend this ends NOW!” Conner activates his Dino Rage and attacks Trent. He charges Trent and Trent dodges his attack and uses the laser arrows again and strikes Conner down and powers him down also.
“Now to finish the rest of you off.” Trent gets ready for one more laser arrow attack. Just as the arrows launch a green flash flashes and the arrows explode and standing in front of the fallen rangers playing his Dragon Dagger activating his Dragon Shield.
“Whoa. No way. It can’t be.” Tommy’s eyes widen and his jaw drops as he looks at his past standing in front of him.
“Go. I’ll take it from here.”Brandon drops his hand to his side and slides his left foot out a little. “Come on white ranger. Show me whatcha got. Dragonzord to Dragozord.” Trent just stands there as Wolfsbane charges at him from behind. As Brandon stands there with his arms to his side he powers up the Dragon Dagger and just as Wolfsbane approaches he spins around and slashes him destroying him. “Child’s play.”
“Show off. Fine you want to play. We’ll play. I’ll give you a little edge.” He drops his sword on the ground.
“Ok we’ll do this hand to hand I guess.” Brandon drops the Dragon Dagger. Both rangers charge at each other and fight.
Conner turns to Tommy and asks, “Ok. Is there like an official sign up sheet for Power Ranger powers? Or do they just hand them out at the door?”
Tommy looks at him still shocked, “Don’t look at me. I’m as shocked as you are.” As the two rangers fight Trent tries to absorb Brandon’s Green Ranger powers like he did with Tommy but Brandon kicks him in the mid-section and jumps back.and throws an energy ball at him hitting him in the chest sending him back a few feet.
“Don’t think you can get me that easily do you?” says Brandon as he stands up and dusts himself off.
“You wont be happy when I get done with you.” Trent runs towards his sword and picks it up to slash Brandon with it and connects. Brandon pops right back up as Trent charges at him with his sword and slashes him on the shoulder and Brandon’s shield stops the sword. Brandon shakes his head no and punches Trent in the stomach sending him flying back.
“Not bad. For the new kid in town. What do you say we take this up a little.” Trent says as he stands up.
“Why not.” Brandon walks towards him kicking up his Dragon Dagger along the way. Trent sends a barrage of laser arrows at him and immediately uses his super speed to get behind Brandon.
“Suprise.” And with a swift strike he carves an “X” on Brandon’s chest causing sparks to fly ever where.
“Nice one. Tell me what you think of this though.” runs at Trent does a jumping spinning crescent kick and then a round kick. As soon Trent blocks the round kick Brandon slashes Trent with his dagger cause Trent to stumble back a few feet where Brandon throws a green energy ball at him and teleports behind Trent and shoots a few laser blasts from his Dragon Dagger hitting Trent straight on.
As Trent gets up he breathes hard. He stands there for a few seconds with his back facing Brandon. He slowly turns his head and says, “You are good. I must admit that. But your arrogance shall be your down fall. “We shall meet again. And then you will feel the wrath of my Dragozord.” With that said he leaps away.

Kali_WolfChilde
05-09-2004, 12:12 AM
cool. keep it up

it's time for a gold rush
05-09-2004, 01:51 AM
this is a pretty good start of a fanfic. one thing though since your chapters are so short why don't you put all your chapters in one thread. just a thought.

GR Dragonzord
05-09-2004, 02:07 AM
this is a pretty good start of a fanfic. one thing though since your chapters are so short why don't you put all your chapters in one thread. just a thought.

i didnt think people would read the post if i post them on one thread but i'll try that.

it's time for a gold rush
05-09-2004, 02:10 AM
i didnt think people would read the post if i post them on one thread but i'll try that.

good luck with your fanfic also have you read mine called power rangers zeo alternate dimension. if not check it out and tell me what you think.

Zord_Crazy
05-09-2004, 12:08 PM
To quote "Oliver Twist", "Please sir, I want some more." ;)

White Zeo Ranger
05-09-2004, 05:10 PM
Not bad thus far

havemercy
05-10-2004, 04:26 AM
I think its kewl people want to convey their ideas of a cool PR series, but most of you ppl are really bad at it. This story in particular. no detail, no depth, lack of skills all around yo. Look at the Smallville/PR crossover, look at Turbo AU, look at anything Aaron Hong. Thats real writing!!!!!

Zord_Crazy
05-10-2004, 05:08 AM
I think its kewl people want to convey their ideas of a cool PR series, but most of you ppl are really bad at it. This story in particular. no detail, no depth, lack of skills all around yo. Look at the Smallville/PR crossover, look at Turbo AU, look at anything Aaron Hong. Thats real writing!!!!!

hey man, it's his first friggin fanfic. Give him a chance. I suppose you were an excellent writer right outta the box huh? :(

Nitro_Thunder_Ranger
05-10-2004, 11:29 AM
I think its kewl people want to convey their ideas of a cool PR series, but most of you ppl are really bad at it. This story in particular. no detail, no depth, lack of skills all around yo. Look at the Smallville/PR crossover, look at Turbo AU, look at anything Aaron Hong. Thats real writing!!!!!


Yeah man give him a chance not all of us have the skills of hemingway or Oscar Wilde in us beside its a PR fan fic its not as if the writer of this fic is going for any awards here and to compare him with other Fan Fic writers who have been writing for quite a while is short sighted and unfair.

You know I'm writing a fan fic myself I encourage anyone to read it and share their views.

Origanal Red Ranger
05-10-2004, 06:31 PM
Your story is decent but could you work on your formating a little better? It is kinda hard to read.

Also Nitro is totally write, writing like everything else takes practice and patience lots of patience.

Zord_Crazy
05-11-2004, 07:50 AM
Yeah man give him a chance not all of us have the skills of hemingway or Oscar Wilde in us beside its a PR fan fic its not as if the writer of this fic is going for any awards here and to compare him with other Fan Fic writers who have been writing for quite a while is short sighted and unfair.

Amen, right friggin on. Fanfics are not perfect and not always the best. But they are made by people who like something a lot, who just want to express their enjoyment of a tv show or comic amonst others who have similar interests. :mad: