Thundering History pt1

[CTR]

AN- this is an updated version with a few deleted lines



E-Evan
J- Jeana
B- Blake
H- hunter
T- tori
S- Shane
D- Dustin
C- cam
A- Aaron
M-merrick
N-ninja
At a beach- figure sits in a small rock at the beach and throws back the hood reviling a face of short blond hair /w black highlights on her bangs and navy eyes /w crimson streaks. The figure cs Blake and Hunter jogging down the beach and teleports away.

B- I thought I saw some1 down here
H- I think u r cing things bro.
B- i dont know how 2 say this but I feel like I know person from somewhere. But I don’t know why
H-lets get out of here i feel like we r being watched
B- yea me 2

they leave and dont notice the figure watching them.
*******

Storm chargers-

T-hey Blake, hey hunter
D- dude. Where have u guys been?
S-yea u guys missed practice
B-we went 2 the beach and practiced there
H-yea & Blake saw a ghost
B-it wasn’t a ghost
T-I say we go and ask sensei
S-yea lets go


Ninja Ops- (the "S" in this ch stands 4 sensei. Shane does not talk)

D-hey cam, sensei?
S-hello rangers what is troubling u?
B-I thought I saw some1 down at the beach but when hunter & I got down there we didn’t c any thing
H-are there any other ninja academies other then the thunder & wind?
S-yes the Storm academy, why?
H-I kept my eyes on the beach and saw some1 then I looked away and when I looked back no1 was there and no tracks ether. So I guessed it was a ninja
S-that is good thinking. Now all we have 2 find out is if this ninja has a morpher
D-why would this dude have a morpher?
S-many years ago the thunder academy had 3 mophers. The storm never had a morpher in their posetion. They asked the thunder sensei if they could have one of theres. Thunder sensei refused their request. Storm sensei and his best ninjas stormed the thunder academy and took the silver thunder morpher & put a fake 1 in its place. No doubt that that morpher has an owner now that lothor has attacked
B-what happened 2 the storm sensei
S- all 3 sensei are animals now:
Wind- genie pig
Thunder- panther
Storm- wolf
Sadly I’m the smallest of the animals and the weakest of the 3 animals. Panthers have great agility, wolves have great speed and show extreme loyalty to one another, and what do I have?
D- um… well your travel size
S- Blake did you get to see what this person looked like?
B- blond hair, 2 black highlights over her bangs, tall, a little skinny, and looked female
S- you have good memory for someone who only had a glimpse
B- we took memory training at the Thunder Academy
S- Cam.. (Turning to his son)
C-yes father
S- contact merrick & tell him 2 come 2 ninja ops he can help us find this morpher and this mystery person after all he is an excellent tracker.
B- he has to contact us before they attack this ninja, other then that I have no other restrictions.
T- no offence but why?
B-I feel like I know that ninja from somewhere. I’m going back 2 the beach 2 try and find any thing. Hunter go 2 the thunder academy and go to the underground base and try to lock on the morphers’ signal
H-sure thing bro.
They leave ninja ops. Hunter morphes and Blake takes his dirt bike 2 the beach

At the beach-
Blake is riding his dirt bike to find the ninja faster

B- that ninja has to be around here somewhere
ninja stands in his way. Blake steps on the brakes
N-u looking 4 me Blake

[CTR]

hey this is 2 everybody-
I would still like riplies on all 8 parts and up I just put into parts because it just makes it easier for readers to read their fav. part

[SlipstreamRange]

No Offence dude but the wholo Alphabet takling is awful, you have a good plot but thats the draw back if you add the names beside the speech it would make it easier to read aswell i could help ya if you want

[Josh Rider]

I don't think this is that good....

[SlipstreamRange]

E-Evan
J- Jeana
B- Blake
H- hunter
T- tori
S- Shane
D- Dustin
C- cam
A- Aaron
M-merrick
N-ninja

At a beach- figure sits in a small rock at the beach and throws back the hood reviling a face of short blond hair /w black highlights on her bangs and navy eyes /w crimson streaks. The figure cs Blake and Hunter jogging down the beach and teleports away.

"i thought i saw something" said Blake as he continued to look, Hunter looked at his brother,"i think ure seeing things Bro" replied Hunter,abit peeved "I dont know how to say this but i feel like i know that person from somewhere but i dont know where" said Blake as he pondered, "Lets bail i feel like were being watched" smirked hunter as he and his brother left,they leave and dont notice the figure watching them.
*******

Storm chargers-
Blake and Hunter enter the Storm Chargers store,"hey Blake, hey hunter" hollered Tori,"dude. Where have u guys been?" asked Dustin,"yea u guys missed practice" said Shade,"we went to the beach and practiced there" replied Blake,"yea and blake thinks he saw a ghost" commented Hunter trying not to laugh.
"it wasn’t a ghost" said Blake Angered,"I say we go and ask sensei" said Tori,"Lets Go" ordered Shane as the Ninja storm team left Storm Chargers


Ninja Ops- (the "S" in this ch stands 4 sensei. Shane does not talk)

"hey cam, sensei?" said Dustin as he entered Ninja Ops,"hello rangers what is troubling you?" said the Talking hamster as he flipped onto the nearby table,"I thought I saw someone down at the beach but when hunter and I got down there we didn’t see any thing" said Blake as he analysed his memory over and over,"Are there any other ninja academies other than the thunder & wind Academy's" asked Hunter,"Yes there is the Storm academy,Why" replied Sensei,"i kept my eyes on the beach and saw someone then I looked away and when I looked back no one was there and no tracks ether. So Im guessing ninja" said Hunter as he hit his palm."that is good thinking. Now all we have to find out is if this ninja has a morpher or not" commented Sensei
"why would this dude have a morpher?" questioned Dustin looking dumbfounded,
"many years ago the thunder academy had 3 morphers. The storm never had a morpher in their possetion. They asked sensei Omono if they could have one of theres. sensei Omono refused their request. Storm sensei and his best ninjas stormed the thunder academy and took the silver thunder morpher amd put a fake in its place. No doubt that that morpher has an owner now that lothor has attacked the over academies" stated Sensei as he showed them the computer console.
"what happened 2 the storm sensei" asked Blake,"all 3 sensei's are animals now"Wind being a genie pig,Thunder being a panther and storm being a Wolf animal,Sadly I’m the smallest of the animals and the weakest of the 3 animals. Panthers have great agility, wolves have great speed and show extreme loyalty to one another, and what do I have?" asked Sensei,"um… well your travel size and Really small to put in your pocket" said Dustin with the only comeback he could think of.
"Blake did you get a good look at the person in question" asked Sensei,"she is female Blonde Hair with Highlights" replied Blake,"Man you have a good memory for a guy who only got a glimpse" said Shane.

"We took Memory Training at the Thunder Academy, its useful most of the time" stated Blake, "Cam(Turning to his son)" hollered Sensei,"yes father" replied Cam,"contact merrick & tell him tocome to ninja ops so he can help us find this morpher and find out who this mysterious ninja is his skills as a Tracker are excellent" commented Sensei as he turned back towards his students.
"Make sure he knows not to attack" asked Blake
"No Offence but Why?" asked Tori. "I feel like I know that ninja from somewhere. I’m going back to the beach to try and find any thing, hunter i suggest you head to the underground base back at the Thunder Academy and see if you can lock onto the Third Morpher" asked Blake,"sure Thing, Bro" replied Hunter as they leave ninja ops. Hunter morphs and Blake takes his dirt bike to the beach

At the beach-Blake is riding his dirt bike to find the ninja faster
"that ninja has to be around here somewhere" said Blake under his Motocross helmet,suddenly a ninja steps into blakes Path he quickly slams the breaks on

"You looking for me" asks the Ninja

[Fire ranger]

You should've just made one thread that had all eight parts to it.

[CTR]

Oh well thanks a lot JR first u said it was cool. your really suportive,Not. Sure SR u can help I'm dont have any insperation and I would welcome the help. E-mail me at Hrsgrl1234@aol.com to FR I did but I did this sor some dumb reason

[DaiShiRio]

sent ya an email its me SR :) hopefully i can make some vids aswell for ya :)

[CTR]

kool thanks i'll check it 2morow morning cause I got PC on that screan name. Oh SR one more thing I'm a girl so please dont call me dude a lot

[Sym Bitch Rain Bot]

Read the damn sticky before posting liek that you retard. Or how about learning how to write to begin with btu that part may be asking a lot.

[OriginalRanger]

Originally posted by Rain Flower
Read the damn sticky before posting liek that you retard. Or how about learning how to write to begin with btu that part may be asking a lot.

Isn't that a bit harsh? I mean, seriously, if you have a problem with someone's writing, you use constructive criticism. Acting like a jerk and dissing someone quite frankly makes you look like an idiot. Have respect for others and they will have respect for you.

[OriginalRanger]

Some starting advice:

To make things more clearer, you should separate dialog better. For example, instead of Why" replied Sensei,"i kept my eyes on the beach and saw someone then I looked away and when I looked back no one was there and no tracks ether. So Im guessing ninja" said Hunter as he hit his palm."that is good thinking. Now all we have to find out is if this ninja has a morpher or not" commented Sensei, you should do:

Why" replied Sensei,
"i kept my eyes on the beach and saw someone then I looked away and when I looked back no one was there and no tracks ether. So Im guessing ninja" said Hunter as he hit his palm.
"that is good thinking. Now all we have to find out is if this ninja has a morpher or not" commented Sensei

Be sure to have your stories proofread, also; other people are a great resource to help pick out errors and improve your story. I'll see if I can be of some help, here:

"Why?" replied Sensei.
"I kept my eyes on the beach and saw someone. I looked away for a second, and when I looked back no one was there. There were no tracks to be found, either. So I'm guessing it was a ninja," said Hunter as he hit his palm.
"Good thinking. Now all we have to find out is if this ninja is in posession of a morpher," commented Sensei.

I hope I could help. Just keep working on your writing. It's something you enjoy doing and you should keep doing it. As time goes on, you'll improve.

[CTR]

thanks OR but the first copy is mine the second one on here is someones else its an ex of how I could have done it.(they didnt like the alphabet talking thing) OR if u want u can e-mail me /w suggestions i have no inspiration right now and the e-mail is Hrsgrl1234@aol.com THIS IS NOT GOOD!!!! I THINK SOME1 DELETED THE OTHER 7PTS TO MY FANFIC! I CANT FIND 'EM never mind i think i've figured out who deleted them (RF *hint hint*)

[CTR]

B- how do you know my name and who are you?
N-i know more about you then just your name. I know your past and about your and hunters parents and your long lost sister. As for me I'am just a wondering ninja searching for my brothers
B-what do you mean you know about my past and about my family. whats this about my sister I never had a sister the only sibling I ever had was hunter. Now i'm gonna ask you again who are you?
N-contact your brother and I will show you what happened to your parents and how they died. You and the other Rangers can call me Zem.
B-(talks in2 morpher) Hunter lock on to my morpher and teleport over
* Hunter arives*
H-What? who the heck are you?
Z-my name is Zem. And I'm a great worrier Duke org.
H- blake who is this wezo?
B-I dont know but she knows us. We are finnaly see how Lothor destroyed ower parents.
H-What?
Z-come and follow me and I suggest that you morph
B&H- THUNDER STORM, RANGER FORM
they go through the cave and as soon as they walked in2 it it was like they had been teleported back home the landscape was the same mountains and the house on a ridge that looked down on a lake and the many trees surounding everything. they walked up the old drive way and notised that their home was under attack Lothors troops were every where along with thousands of Kalzacks. finally Blake and Hunter found their parents fighting for their lives.
B- Hunter we have to help them.
Z-you wont be able to this is all just a shadow of the past, you are invisible to everyone here it wouldnt matter if you went up to their face yelled they still would not see you.
H- blake look at thet little girl she's about to fall and we cant help her.
B- Zem is that ower sister that you tolled me about
Z-yes
H- What!? we had a sister? well we kinda young when all this happened so its not supriseing that I forgot about her
Z- the Wind sensi fighting and he will get your sister and she will survive
just then there came a scream Blake and Hunter looked at their parents they had fallen and the Thunder sensi was taking young blake and hunter away from the house folowing him came a sensi that they did not recognise bringing their sister
Z- that is the Storm sensi. lets go you have seen enough.
blake and hunter follow.

Back at the beach-


H- Zem what was ower sisters name? Do you even know?
Z-yes
B-then tell us
Z-Aaron that is your sisters name. she survived and studied under the Thunder Sensi and later she was taken to the Storm Academy to train under the Storm Sensi
B- for someone is an org you definetly know a lot about us and ower sister. did you know her?
Z-yes
H- is she alive? do you know where she is? does she remember us? Does she have a...
he was cut off by Zem sreaming in pain. Blake and Hunter run over to her.
B-are you alright?
Z- why does this have to happen know ( just barly geting the words out through the pain)
H- what? whats going to happen to you? we have a friend that can help you.
Z-this may come to a shock to you but I have the Silver Thunder Morpher. and here is another shock that you wll find out once the pain is gone ( still the same voice as the last time she spoke)
Suddenly th screaming stopped and where Zem used to be a young girl was standing in her place sahe lokked about 2 years younger then Blake and right next to her was Zem.
Girl- hello Blake. Hello Hunter recognise me from this morning
B-Aaron is that really you? we were the brothers you were looking for?
H-i cant believe it
A- yea its me. so are you guy just gonna stand there or what
they al give eachother a big hug and head for ninja ops.

-Ninja Ops-

T- hey guys so did you find any thing about that ninja or the morpher?
H-both. we found that that ninja was ower sister we never knew we had
B- and the morpher is in the hands of the onlyone I know who could use it to its fullest potesial. (Aaron walks in) guys I would like you to meant ower sister.
H- Aaron this is shane, red wind ranger, Dustin, yellow wind ranger, and Tori, blue wind ranger. Shane,Dustin, Tori this is Aaron silver thunder ranger.

[CTR]

A- Hello everyone. Hello Merrick its been a long time
M- it sure has Aaron
S- so you 2 know eachother?
M- you could say that
A- long story and history
Sensi- Aaron let me see your morpher. Who knows how powerfull it is
A- no offence but I dont trust anyone with my morpher and my reasons are in my past
C- sorry to interupt but we have a monster on our hands
A- you just figured that out?
C- you are saying that you knew that you knew it was on Earth?
A- I was an org for a few years and I guess I kinda got this ability that lets me sence other orgs and monsters.
D- Sweat! Dude thats so like totally awsome
( Aaron grabs Dustin by the shirt)
A- Dont push it with me Dustin and dont call me dude
D- yes ma'am ( turns to wisper to shane) man whats her problem?
S- I dont know but she reminds me a little bit of dark blake and hunter
D- yea, your right bro.
A- I heard all of that Dustin and Shane. lets go we got a monster to take care of
S- Tori, Dustin ready?
T&D- ready!
T,D,S- Ninja Storm, Ranger Form
H- Blake, Aaron you guys ready!?
A- I was born ready
B- lets do it
H&B- Thunder Storm, Ranger Form
A- Silver Storm, Thunder Form (talks in2 morpher) Goldie you there?
G- yea, whats up?
A- nothin, just maken sure you are alright. Silver out ( every1 walks out of Ninja Ops)
M- I think I will stay here and help Cam and Sensi. Oh and Aaron go show them how its done
A- you got it
**- Quarie-**
S- stop right there
A- Retenax your mine
R- just one ranger? well that wont be that hard. How about I take all of you on
A- you wont stand a chance against me let alone all 6 of us. besides I dont need these losers help. I only have 2 partners and thats the Gold Thunder Ranger and the White Storm Ranger
H- do you mind if I ask who the heck are they? ( irritated voice)
A- you'll find out soon enough. ( talks in2 morpher) Goldie, White you guys there? Hello?
W- Dude I can hear Ok. Me and Goldie are at the Quarie searching for you guys on the Storm Cycles
A- Ok just lock on my morpher it'll be quicker that way. Silver out (turns her attension to the 5 ragers) you guys ready...
D- but you just said that you only fight with the Gold and White Rangers.
A- you didnt let me finish. what I ment was are you ready to watch ME fight and you guys could have a break
S- I dont think thats gonna happen we fight together as a team
A- Ok you guys can fight but stay out of my way
Just then 2 waves of energy hit Retenax and two figures were standing on both sides of Aaron. One Gold and one White
A- (turning to the Thunder & Wind Rangers) guys this is Evan, White Ranger and Jeana, Gold Ranger
E- you guys ready
J- O yea
A- its on now

[CTR]

The Storm Rangers attack Retenax on full force, everyone in perfect sync with the other. Once enough damage had been done they combined their wepons the falcon blaster, panda daggers and the cheeta bomerang (the daggers connect under the bomerang at both ends then that conects to the falcon blaster. Aaron on the left, Jeana on the right and Evan in the back.
E,A,J- Storm Cannon
E-fire
A blast of energy shoots out of the end of the cannon and the monster is destroyed.
A- all right guys keep your eyes out for those scrolls of empowerment we want to blast them before they reach Retenax (shoots one out of the sky) got one
E- you think there gonna send more down?
J- who knows just watch out for them
A- yea, and I want to keep the zordss out of this if we can. Dont you think so?
E&J- yea, your right
A- so consider this target practice. who ever nails the most scrolls wins
E- alright
(A LOT of scrolls come down)
J- I think Lothor wants to energise this monster really bad other wise he wouldnt be wasting scrolls
After a few hundred scrolls are taken out Lothor gives up
A- I got 135
E- 105
J- 70, I never really aimed I just threw them
S- you guys totally rocked
D-that monster didnt stand a chance
T- those were some great moves you guys pulled
J- thanks but, White and I got to go
A- Oh no you dont, if I have to stand these guys you and Evan have to also
E- Goldie we cant just leave poor old Aaron and let her fight with these rookie ( puts on a sad face)
J- alright I'm in
B- common lets get back to Ninja Ops

**-NINJA OPS-**

Senei- good job rangers. I am proud of all of you. Now if the Storm Rangers would demorph
E- Storm Form
J&A- Thunder Form
Evan has hair just like Merrik. Jeana has black hair with gold bangs.
S- Jeana your a ranger too?
T- you know her?
S- yea, shes the new girl at the skate park I tolled you about
T- Evan your that new surfer at the beach arnt you?
E- guilty
J- same here
Sensei- Evan, Jeana, Aaron tell me how you got your morphers

[DaiShiRio]

ill redo the other parts during this week and will have a new story hopefully :)

[Sym Bitch Rain Bot]

Originally posted by OriginalRanger
Isn't that a bit harsh? I mean, seriously, if you have a problem with someone's writing, you use constructive criticism. Acting like a jerk and dissing someone quite frankly makes you look like an idiot. Have respect for others and they will have respect for you.

Actually much of the insults came off he could not read the sticky posts about not flooding the forum. Since he cannot take the time to know how to conduct yourself on this section of the board, then why should I offer him any constructive criticism. He obviously doesn't care enough to read the single rule of this forum why should I care? (and he was a case that proved why I did this to begin with since too many were flooding and then bumping their fics to get more people to read it.)

[CTR]

if your talking about me RF get somthing strate i'm a girl not a guy. so i didnt read the stupid sticky so sue me.
SR if u think u can redo my story and type it like u want and put in ur name dont even think about it. cause thats slander or whatever that thing is called when u print someones writing and say its yours

[Sym Bitch Rain Bot]

excuse me what were you saying? Something about me mixing up gender (which whoops it is about 90% male here) but otherwise I couldn't understand your blatantly awful writing. Look up your vocabulary in a dictionary *cough*slander*cough* before making such a feeble attempt.

As far as you not reading the sticky..... do you normally go to message boards and not look at the rules in any way? Shit there is one fucking rule and you are too lazy and/or illiterate, of which one it is primarily I am uncertain based on your dreadful writing ability.

Now, just behave and don't do the multiple post thing again. That was the entire point of my entering the conversation. You broke a rule because of your own damn fault and now deal with it when you get on an admin's bad side. Don't complain because I was rude due to your lack of common sense.

[CTR]

so i have bad spelling i'm not perfect. shut up and listen to me. i'm sorry i didnt read the stupid sticky i'll make a mental note to do that next time. and for the record i never said u were rude to me and i never said u messed up my gender is was just stating a fact a bout my self so people dont think i'm a guy, 4 some reason that gets on my nervs some times

[OriginalRanger]

Originally posted by Rain Flower
Actually much of the insults came off he could not read the sticky posts about not flooding the forum. Since he cannot take the time to know how to conduct yourself on this section of the board, then why should I offer him any constructive criticism. He obviously doesn't care enough to read the single rule of this forum why should I care? (and he was a case that proved why I did this to begin with since too many were flooding and then bumping their fics to get more people to read it.)

The two are two different matters. Dealing with a rule and deliberately telling someone that they are a talentless piece of crap are two completely, and I mean completely, different things. And you ought to care because every writer, including yourself, started somewhere. And how would you like it if someone else insulted your ability to do what you love to do? Again, if someone breaks a rule, than you have the right to let them know about it; it's certainly your perogative and it was not in any way what I was upset about. However, you have no right to just insult someone like that. I'm sorry if I sound harsh; I don't mean to. I'm just saying how I feel. This will be my last comment on this thread. Ban me if you want; I still feel the way I feel.

[CTR]

Originally posted by OriginalRanger
The two are two different matters. Dealing with a rule and deliberately telling someone that they are a talentless piece of crap are two completely, and I mean completely, different things. And you ought to care because every writer, including yourself, started somewhere. And how would you like it if someone else insulted your ability to do what you love to do? Again, if someone breaks a rule, than you have the right to let them know about it; it's certainly your perogative and it was not in any way what I was upset about. However, you have no right to just insult someone like that. I'm sorry if I sound harsh; I don't mean to. I'm just saying how I feel. This will be my last comment on this thread. Ban me if you want; I still feel the way I feel.
thanks 4 sticking up 4 me. didu get my E-mail?

[OriginalRanger]

Originally posted by CTR
thanks 4 sticking up 4 me. didu get my E-mail?

Yep; I got it. I was glad to help you out; us writers have to stand up for each other:D .

[OriginalRanger]

P.S.: Feel free to check out my fic at http://www.rangerboard.com/showthread.php?s=&threadid=17306 (anyone from the old any writers in the house please give me input thread).

[DaiShiRio]

sorry i havnt checked this topic for abit erm CTR i am SlipstreamRange and in know way do i want to take over this fanfic i just want to help ya :) i have an idea or few that i sent ya threw email hope we can work together with it aswell catch ya later

[OriginalRanger]

CTR, was just wondering if you got my e-mail?

[DaiShiRio]

nope didnt get it email me at ashaw83@ntlworld.com i need to change my emailing for this SN

[OriginalRanger]

Originally posted by AbareKiller
nope didnt get it email me at ashaw83@ntlworld.com i need to change my emailing for this SN

Um...I'm not CTR.

[CTR]

Originally posted by OriginalRanger
Um...I'm not CTR. thats me :D sorry to every1 who liked my fic but I kinda lost inspiration and interest in it and I'm helping my frieend with her Mighty Ducks D2 book.