6-02-03 Power Rangers Phoenix Force ep01

[Dami-chan]

'Raising Hope pt.1'

http://www.geocities.com/phoenixfic

-enter phoenix force section>episodes>ep1

note:make sure to read the ancient history.

Post your thoughts here when done, i hope you enjoy it :)

[Go_Ninja_Storm6]

Hey! Not bad...but I think that your grammar needs to be tweeked.

Anyway, it was intriguing...hope that you continue wiht this

GNS6

[Panty Strangled]

Oh.....Hell.....


do you have any grasp of spelling, grammer, etc?

I've found millions of mistakes in both your plot synopsis AND your attempt at a script, what Abablack sees in this crap is a mystery, this makes Josh Rider look decent

don't get me wrong, the story has good stuff in it, but your presentation is complete shit

[Bionic Red]

Phoenix, I read through the episode that you've finished, and it lacked only two things: Character and description.

Character - You need to add descriptions of all your characters, give them things they like to do, and how those things influence their decisions! Your story should not have to wait for a director to find vision on his own, you have to make us see what you see.

Description - A fight scene cannot be "Fight: rangers win." You have to describe most of the moves involved, if not all of them. We have to know what's going on as if we were witnessing it ourselves. Think of how you would describe a fight scene from your favorite action movie.

[AbaBlack]

I am really interested in all fanfics, escpially ones that are made up, even when they have new drawn ranger, that makes me even more excited. I have yet to read the first chapter, I plan to tomorrow morning, but I read the 'ancient history' and it sounded interesting to me, not on of the best like Forever Red: the Novel, but I like it as a new fanfic that is starting to grow!

[ModrnEerie]

Originally posted by Zarius
this makes Josh Rider look decent
You better be kidding..

[Dami-chan]

next time on Power Rangers Phoenix Force

Raising Hope pt.2

Zoltar helps the rangers unlock there power weapons to fight the fire demon.

6-7-03