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blacklion400
05-17-2009, 06:16 PM
A short parody script I made for Jungle Fury, tell me what you think. Note that this is the first parody I've ever made, so try and be nice. :)

Power Rangers Jungle Fury Parody
Sigh of the Exploding Tiger

Cast

Casey - Jungle Fury Red Ranger
Masher (Monster) - (No Lines)

EXT. CGI BACKGROUND MORPHING SCENE

(ALWAYS LOUDLY) CASEY: JUNGLE BEAST, SPIRT UNLEASHED!

WAVES HIS HANDS AROUND FOR A WHILE, AS RED ENERGY BUILDS UP WITHIN THEM. HE THEN THROWS IT AT A TREE. THE ENERGEY BOUNCES OFF AND HITS ANOTHER TREE, THEN ANOTHER, THEN ANOTHER, UNTIL IT COMES BACK TO CASEY, WHO KICKS IT WITH HIS FOOT. THE ENERGY IS THROWN INTO A NET HANGING FROM A TREE, WHERE IT BOUNCES BACK INTO CASEY, AND THE RED RANGER SUIT FINALLY CLOTHES HIS BODY (MINUS HELMET). THE SMALL AMOUNT OF ENERGY USED TO MAKE THE HELMET FLOATS BEHIND CASEY, WHO TURNS AROUND AND GRABS IT WITH AN INVISIBLE FISHING ROD, AND THEN REELS IT IN. IT HITS HIS HEAD AND THE HELMET FINALLY APPEARS.

EXT. CITY SQUARE

(WAVING HIS ARMS ERATICALLY) CASEY: JUNGLE FURY, RED RANGER!

CASEY GOES INTO A BATTLE STANCE, AND ABOUT SEVEN EXPLOSIONS OCCUR BEHIND HIM ONE AFTER THE OTHER.

CUT TO MASHER, WHO IS ‘FACEPALMING’ CASEY IN EMBARRASSMENT. THE WORD ‘FACEPALM’ FLASHES ON SCREEN.

(THROUGH ALL OF FOLLOWING PARAGRAPH) CASEY: HIYAAAA! HIYAA!

RED RANGER RUSHES OVER TO MASHER, AN EXPLOSION OCCURING WITH EVERY STEP HE TAKES. CASEY THEN STARTS JUMPING FROM THE WALLS, NOT TOUCHING THE MONSTER AT ALL. MASHER LOOKS AT HIM CONFUSED. CASEY THEN LANDS IN FRONT OF HIM (LAST HIYAA!), AS MAHSER RESPONDS BUY PUNCHING HIM SOLIDLY IN THE STOMACH, SENDING HIM FLYING THROUGH THE AIR. MORE EXPLOSIONS OCCUR AS HE FLYS AND LANDS TO THE GROUND.

(AS HE GETS UP) CASEY: RIGHT….

CASEY PULLS OUT HIS JUNGLE CHUCKS.

CASEY: JUNGLE CHUCKS! HIYAA!

CASEY STARTS THROWING THEM AROUND IN HIS HANDS IN AN OBSCURE FASHION, INCLUSDING PASSING THEM THROUGH HIS LEGS AND BALANCING THEM ON HIS HEAD. WHEN FINSIHED, HE PERFORMS A BATTLE STANCE WHILE ROUGHLY TWENTY EXPLOSIONS HAPPEN BEHIND HIM.

MASHER SCRATCHES HIS HEAD IN MORE CONFUSION.

(THORUGHOUT ENTIRE BATTLE SEQUENCE) CASEY: HIYAA!

CASEY JUMPS OVER TO HIM IN A GOOFY FASHION AND HITS HIM WITH THE NUM-CHUCKS (VERY LIGHTLY). THEY DO NO DAMAGE. MASHER GRABS THE NUMCHUCKS, HOLDS THEM TOGETHER, AND THEN SNAPS THEM ON HIS KNEE. CASEY LOOKS DUMBFOUNDED, AS MASHER PUNCHES HIM AGAIN, ONCE MORE SENDING HIM FLYING (MORE EXPLOSIONS).

(AS HE GETS UP) CASEY: YOU ASKED FOR IT! HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA…….

CASEY JUMPS VERY HIGH INTO THE AIR AS SEVERAL EXPLOSIONS OCCUR BELOW HIM. HE LANDS IN FRONT OF THE MONSTER READY TO FIGHT. MASHER SWIFTLY PULLS OUT TWO LARGE MALLETS AND SMASHES THEM INTO EITHER SIDE OF CASEY’S HEAD, CRUSHING IT COMPLETELY. AN EXPLOSION OF BLOOD, FLESH, BRAIN AND HELMET OCCURS. THE MALLET SCENE IS REPLAYED AND PAUSED AS THE TWO MALLETS SMASH TOGETHER. THE WORD ‘OWNED’ FLASHES ON SCREEN. CASEY’S HEADLESS BODY FALLS TO THE GROUND, AND MASHER RETURNS THE MALLETS TO HIS BELT. THE SCREEN FADES AS THE MONSTER WALKS AWAY.

END.

PR-rangerfan
05-17-2009, 10:24 PM
To tell the truth, I hated it. It did not make me laugh, it did not make me chuckle, it did not even ENTERAIN me. No words exist for the amount of awful that fic brought about. I think I was entertained more by "Meet the Spartans". Seriously? This fic does not even deserve to be ridiculed. No, I will end my critique with NO ridicule whatsoever.

PR-rangerfan
05-17-2009, 10:42 PM
To tell the truth, I hated it. It did not make me laugh, it did not make me chuckle, it did not even ENTERAIN me. No words exist for the amount of awful that fic brought about. I think I was entertained more by "Meet the Spartans". Seriously? This fic does not even deserve to be ridiculed. No, I will end my critique with NO ridicule whatsoever.

sorry, pardon. I mssed the part where you said it was your first story. im sorry, if I sounded like a jerk. I do not wish to break your writing spirit.

However, that does not take away from the fact that your story was simply not good. I know, you were lampooning kalishploshions. But seriously? The fic was not a very good satire.

I think you would benefit from giving your monster some dialogue. Really, lease leave the witty banter to the charachters. make the MONSTER coment on the explosions. And of course, it al goes from there...

blacklion400
05-18-2009, 11:08 AM
fair enough. i'll take your critisism with respect. I'm just not that great when it comes to witty banter. also, i think it would look better on screen. thanks for the feedback.

ShadowRanger
05-18-2009, 11:45 AM
No. If you want to post a fic on this board fine. You want opinions, fine. But don't then turn around and please be nice because this is my first fic. Fact is as a parody this fic sucks. It isn't funny end of story.

It might be your first fic, but if you don't find out now you'll just end up writing more like it and then what would be the point of asking for opinions?

I'm going to close this thread now, because I can see this degenerating into a farce.