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TommyOliverFan1
05-10-2009, 12:36 AM
This new story of mine has the suits of Denjiman, the Mecha of Maskman, and original Rangers, allies, and villains.


RANGERS
Red Electro Ranger
Name: Derek Cohen
Morpher: Electro Morpher
Weapons: Electro Saber/Boomerang
Vehicles: Electro Cycle (with the Denjiman writing on the side saying Electro Cycle), Electro Cruiser
Zords: Electro Streaker Zord

Green Electro Ranger
Name: Damian Johnson (he's related to TJ)
Morpher: Electro Morpher
Weapons: Electro Saber/Boomerang
Vehicles: Electro Buggy (with the Denjiman writing on the side saying Electro Buggy; shares with Blue, Yellow, and Pink), Electro Cruiser
Zords: Electro Drill Zord

Blue Electro Ranger
Name: Aiden Phillips
Morpher: Electro Morpher
Weapons: Electro Saber/Boomerang
Vehicles: Electro Buggy (shares with Green, Yellow, and Pink), Electro Cruiser
Zords: Electro Tank Zord

Yellow Electro Ranger
Name: Emma Jones (with skirt added on)
Morpher: Electro Morpher
Weapons: Electro Saber/Boomerang
Vehicles: Electro Buggy (shares with Green, Blue, and Pink), Electro Cruiser
Zords: Electro Jet Zord

Pink Electro Ranger
Name: Mia Nelson
Morpher: Electro Morpher
Weapons: Electro Saber/Boomerang
Vehicles: Electro Buggy (shares with Green, Blue, and Yellow), Electro Cruiser
Zords: Electro Gyro Zord

ALLIES
Dr. Tyler Jones, Dr. Elizabeth Jones
VILLAINS
King Vypor, Queen Vyprin, Idora, Datatron, Miden, Electroids, Electrodrones
MORPH CALL:
"Time to Go Electro!"
MEGAZORDS
Electro Fighter Megazord
Zords: Streaker, Drill, Tank, Jet, Gyro
Modes: Original


Episode 01: Time to Go Electro, Part 1
(This part is the intro)
DAMIAN JOHNSON (in thoughts):
It was a normal day on Earth when the distress call was sent out to Earth. They told us that the Vyperian Army were attacking. They gathered a team of 4 skilled individuals and made them work together, but now they needed 1 more to become the new leader as the Red Electro Ranger.
(After the intro, the scene switches to the Electric Fighter Command Center)
EMMA JONES:
Damian, is everything all right?
DAMIAN JOHNSON:
No, as a matter of a fact, everything's all wrong.
MIA NELSON:
Why?
DAMIAN JOHNSON:
I just don't want another guy coming in and telling us what to do.
AIDEN PHILLIPS:
We don't, either, but we know we need him.
EMMA JONES:
Who says it going to be a guy?
DAMIAN JOHNSON:
I do.
EMMA JONES:
You are such a dude.
DAMIAN JOHNSON:
I try my best.
(As the team continues to talk the alarm sounds)
AIDEN PHILLIPS:
We better check it out.
(The Rangers rush to the control room where the city viewer camera is)
DAMIAN JOHNSON:
The Vyperian Army is attacking the city with the Electroids.
MIA NELSON:
Let's get them!
DAMIAN JOHNSON:
Ready?!
OTHER RANGERS:
Ready!
ALL RANGERS:
Time to Go Electro!
(The 4 Rangers Morph into action when their suits appear and helmet materializes on them)
PINK ELECTRO RANGER:
Come on, guys!
OTHER RANGERS:
Right!
ALL RANGERS:
Electro Sabers!
(The Rangers destroy the Electroids with the Electro Sabers)
DATHOR:
Impressive, but not good enough!
GREEN ELECTRO RANGER:
Oh, yeah?
ALL RANGERS:
Electro Sabers, Boomerang Mode!
DATHOR:
Oh, I'm so scared!
BLUE ELECTRO RANGER:
You should be!
YELLOW ELECTRO RANGER:
Come on, Aiden!
BLUE ELECTRO RANGER:
You got it, Em!
(Aiden and Emma double-team Dathor and knock him down)
PINK ELECTRO RANGER:
Damian, it's our turn now.
GREEN ELECTRO RANGER:
Right!
BOTH:
Saber Mode!
(They weaken Dathor enough that he has to retreat back to the Vyper Base)
KING VYPOR:
You've failed me again?!
DATHOR:
Yes, I have. I'm sorry master.
QUEEN VYPRIN:
Should we destroy him dear?
KING VYPOR:
No, not yet. I think I could still use him.
(Back at the Electric Fighter Command Center)
DR. TYLER JONES:
Nice work, Rangers.
DR. ELIZABETH JONES:
Yeah, you were amazing on the battlefield.
MIA NELSON:
Thanks, Mrs. Jones.
DR. ELIZABETH JONES:
How many times have I told you? Call me Elizabeth.
AIDEN PHILLIPS:
Okay, Elizabeth.
DAMIAN JOHNSON:
Hey, Elizabeth, have you and Tyler recruited the new leader yet?
DR. ELIZABETH JONES:
Actually we have.
DR. TYLER JONES:
He'll be here any minute.
DEREK COHEN:
Looking for me?
DAMIAN JOHNSON:
Actually, we are.
DR. TYLER JONES:
Thanks for coming.
DEREK COHEN:
No problem, it's not everyday you get recruited to save the world from evil forces.
EMMA JONES:
True.
MIA NELSON:
I already think your cool.
DEREK COHEN:
Thanks, I'm Derek by the way.
AIDEN PHILLIPS:
Aiden.
EMMA JONES:
Emma.
MIA NELSON:
Mia.
DAMIAN JOHNSON (softly):
Damian.
DEREK COHEN:
What?
DAMIAN JOHNSON (louder):
Damian.
DEREK COHEN:
Nice to meet you, guys.
DR. ELIZABETH JONES:
Now that you've met each other, we need you to test the Ranger technology, Derek.
DEREK COHEN:
Okay.
(Derek is put through multiple tests, which he passes at the end)
DAMIAN JOHNSON:
He did a good job.
MIA NELSON:
Yeah, he's incredible.
DEREK COHEN (weakly):
So, did I pass?
DR. TYLER JONES:
With flying colors. Congratulations, Derek. You're the new Red Ranger.
DEREK COHEN (happily):
Thank you so much.
(The alarm sounds)
DR. ELIZABETH JONES:
Rangers, the Vyperian Army is attacking the city again.
DAMIAN JOHNSON:
We're on it!
DEREK COHEN (trying to keep up):
Yeah.
(The 4 Rangers Morph into action, and Derek does later)
GREEN ELECTRO RANGER:
Let's call on the buggy.
ALL RANGERS EXCLUDING RED:
Electro Buggy!
DR. TYLER JONES (on Derek's communicator):
Derek, call on the Electro Cycle and follow the others.
RED ELECTRO RANGER:
Got it! Electro Cycle!
(The 5 soon arrive at the scene)
DATHOR:
We meet again, Rangers! I see you brought a new friend.
RED ELECTRO RANGER:
Yeah, they did, and now you're going to feel their wrath.
YELLOW ELECTRO RANGER:
Let's all go together.
OTHER RANGERS:
Right!
RED ELECTRO RANGER:
Red Electro Ranger!
GREEN ELECTRO RANGER:
Green Electro Ranger!
BLUE ELECTRO RANGER:
Blue Electro Ranger!
YELLOW ELECTRO RANGER:
Yellow Electro Ranger!
PINK ELECTRO RANGER:
Pink Electro Ranger!
ALL RANGERS:
Power Rangers Electric Fighters, Let's Go!
DATHOR:
Enough talking, let's fight!
PINK ELECTRO RANGER:
No problem!
ALL RANGERS:
Electro Sabers!
(The Rangers' sabers aren't enough to defeat the new and improved Dathor)
DATHOR:
Soon you will be destroyed.
RED ELECTRO RANGER (weakening):
No!
TO BE CONTINUED...
Next time on "Power Rangers Electric Fighters"
Aiden is injured in battle which causes the Rangers' new Electro Cannon to not take full charge with all Ranger energy. Will it mean their end? Find out next time.

NOTE: My next episode will be written in prose, as opposed to script. Hope you guys like it.

Episode 02: Time to Go Electro, Part 2
The Rangers lay defeated as Dathor was lauging victoriously. "You pathetic Rangers!" he called out from a distance. "We have to keep fighting!" Mia, now unmorphed, shouted. "Mia's right. I'm not giving up!" Derek shouted, then he called out "Time to Go Electro!" and morphed into the Red Electro Ranger.
"You dare to fight me!" Dathor shouted at him. "Yes, I do." Derek shouted wielding his Electro Saber. "I will destroy you, Red Ranger!" Dathor very angrily said while grunting. "Oh, yeah? I don't think you will!" Derek screamed while slashing Dathor with his saber. "No!" Dathor shouted, "I am victorious!"
"You're not anymore!" Derek shouted. Then, with the call of "Boomerang Mode!" by Derek, his Electro Saber turned into the Electro Boomerang knocking Dathor down with one hit. He then retreated out of battle and returned to the Vyper Base as Derek demorphed and his team surrounded him and celebrated his first victory, he thought is his mind that he could get used to that. After Dathor fleed the battlefield and the battle was over, the Rangers returned to their base. "You were great, Derek." Emma, his newest fan, called out to him. "Thanks, Emma." Derek replied. "Call me, Em." Emma answered him. Just as the team continued to have fun, Dathor appeared on the monitor, attacking the city. "Let's get him!" Aiden called out. The team then morphed and revved up the Electro Cycle and Electro Buggy and raced to the scene. "Oh, not you again." Dathor called out in frustration. "Sorry to crash your little party, Dathor!" Damian told him. "No need to be sorry, you can repay me with your lives!" Dathor shouted as he morphed into his new Ultra Form. "What?!" Aiden screamed out as he was slashed by Dathor's saber. "Aiden, are you all right?" Mia asked him worrily. "Yeah, I'm fine." Aiden said weakly. "We have to get him back to the base." Derek told everyone. "I'll do it, you guys battle Dathor." Damian told them as he helped Aiden onto the Electro Buggy, and they rushed to the base as the others continued to fight Dathor with two missing team members. "Not so tough now are you, Red Ranger?!" Dathor asked with anger and vengeance as he attacked Emma and Mia to make Derek feel worthless. "I want let you hurt them, Dathor!" Derek called as he powered his Electro Boomerang up. "Boomerang Blade!" He called as his attack knocked Dathor to the side. "You won't defeat me this time, Ranger, Ultra Blast!" Dathor's attack demorphed the team of 3 and weakened them all when Dathor was knocked down by a powerful kick by Damian, who had just arrived at the scene. "Hey, no one messes with my team!" Damian shouted as Dathor looked like he wanted to destroy him on sight. "You'll pay for that!" Dathor screamed at Damian powering up his blast attack. "That won't stop me!" Damian called as he powered up his Electro Saber. "Saber Strike!" Damian called and his attack didn't work as well as he hoped it would.
"What?" Damian questioned while Dathor blasted him to the ground. "Rangers! Rangers, do you read me?" Elizabeth asked on Derek's communicator. "We read you." Derek answered as Elizabeth told him this "I've created the new Electro Cannon for your use, but I'm afraid you can't use it if Aiden's not there. "What if Aiden is here?" Aiden asked trying to fight back his pain. "Aiden!" Mia shouted happily. "Come on, guys, let's destroy him and use that new Electro Cannon to do it!" Aiden shouted. "Right!" The others said. "Time to Go Electro!" The Rangers screamed as they morphed. "Now, let's use that new Electro Cannon!" Derek requested. "Electro Cannon, power up!" Dathor looked worried as the Rangers were ready to destroy him. "Electro Cannon, charged and ready...aim...fire!" The Rangers shouted as a powerful blast of energy striked and destroyed Dathor. "All right!" Aiden screamed, "That's enough of him." Then back at the Rangers' base the Rangers celebrated their first full team victory with an awesome dinner filled with everyone's favorite food and drinks. "That new Electro Cannon is awesome, Elizabeth." Emma told her while eating some pizza. "I helped, too!" Tyler said clamoring for attention. The Rangers and Elizabeth laughed when Elizabeth told the about how serious this was going to be. They all agreed to be their for each other and their mentors until they end. They were know the defenders of Earth as the Power Rangers Electric Fighters.
THE END OF THIS EPISODE
Next time on "Power Rangers Electric Fighters"
The new Zords are being developed when the newest monster of the Vyperian Army is attacking the city. Will it mean the city's end? Find out next time.

PR-rangerfan
05-10-2009, 03:14 AM
im sorry to say that the way this fic has been structured has turned me off from reading it. I believe you would benefit from a straighter narrative, one in prose, rather than script. just a suggestion. I will give this fic one more chance. So, uh, yeah. Okay

TommyOliverFan1
05-10-2009, 11:26 AM
PR-rangerfan, I will give you a preview of my writing in prose. Comment me and tell me if you like better than the script-like writing.

The Rangers lay defeated as Dathor was lauging victoriously. "You pathetic Rangers!" he called out from a distance. "We have to keep fighting!" Mia, now unmorphed, shouted. "Mia's right. I'm not giving up!" Derek shouted, then he called out "Time to Go Electro!" and morphed into the Red Electro Ranger.
"You dare to fight me!" Dathor shouted at him. "Yes, I do." Derek shouted wielding his Electro Saber. "I will destroy you, Red Ranger!" Dathor very angrily said while grunting. "Oh, yeah? I don't think you will!" Derek screamed while slashing Dathor with his saber. "No!" Dathor shouted, "I am victorious!"
"You're not anymore!" Derek shouted. Then, with the call of "Boomerang Mode!" by Derek, his Electro Saber turned into the Electro Boomerang knocking Dathor down with one hit. He then retreated out of battle and returned to the Vyper Base as Derek demorphed and his team surrounded him and celebrated his first victory, know he knew what this was all about.

PR-rangerfan
05-10-2009, 01:48 PM
Yep, that's MUCH better!! Now, I can read this fic with ease. Having read it, I coldn't helpbut notice some lines were a little cheesy. But that's okay, Power Rangers i SUPPOSED o be cheesy at times. Ill see if I can catch the next chapter. Hope the next chapter is written in prose! Oh! Don't forget to read MY fic, Power Rangers: The Brave and the Bold, please!