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akermish
07-19-2007, 02:02 AM
Disclaimer: I do not own the rangers just the plot and Andrew and if I did then I would not be Writing this in a trailer

The Return of the Green Ranger

“Late again Mr. Kermish? ” Principle Randall Catches me as i walk into to the office to sign in. Normally this is when the smartass part of me comes out and says something, but I know that I am going to have to keep my mouth shut if she is going to bye my latest excuse.

“yes ma'am I left home and got caught behind the train while I was on my way here so my mom was not able to write me a note.” which is a lie. I just over slept which is a trait I guess i inherited from my uncle because from what I have been told he was always late and would forget his head if it was not attached.

“Nice try Mr. Kermish, but you have Three days detention with Dr. Oliver, and the only reason you are getting it with your uncle is because of the stupid board policy that says that the newest teacher gets detention duty. Now go off to class before you are any later.” At lunch I catch up with my friends: Conner, Ethan, Kira, and Trent

“Man that” I look around to see if Randall is near us, “Randall is a bitch.”

“Late Again?” Conner asks me. “What excuse did you use this time and what did she give you?”

“Train and three days detention with Uncle Tommy.”

“Brutal man.” Ethan says as Uncle Tommy walks up to the table

“Andrew, what did you do to land up with me for three days?” Uncle Tommy Asks me.

“Give you three guesses and the first two don't count.” I say to him.

“You was late and used the train excuse.”

“Correct.”

“Don't use that excuse again it did not work for me in high school and it is not going to work for you either. That goes for all of you.” Uncle Tommy tells us as the bell rings to go to class

“End of our freedom and back to sleep we go.” I say to the gang as we leave.

“I still do not know how you maintain A's and B's when are you do is sleep.” Trent says as we walk into Uncle Tommy's classroom

“Not in here I don't Uncle Tommy would have my head and besides after lunch I am awake.” I say as i take a piece of paper from my binder and make into a ball and fling it at Trent. It hits him in the back of his head and when it does he turns around and gives me a middle finger.

“Trent stay over after class.” Uncle tommy tells him. When Uncle Tommy has his back to the class writing up today's assignment Trent gives me a look and if looks could kill he would be sitting on death row. Then he turns back around to listen to Uncle Tommy for the rest of the lesson.

“What did Dr. O want Trent?” Kira asks him when he comes out of Uncle Tommy's room at the end of the period

“Just that I have been awarded an art scholarship to the school of my choice in the fall after I graduate.” He says as we walk to the parking lot before I go back to Uncle Tommy's room for detention.

“Good for you, so you was not in trouble for flipping me off?” I ask him.

“Nah, in fact when I asked him about it he said that he did not even see it and you probably deserved it.”

“Are we still up for training when I get through with my detention?”

“Sure, maybe Dr. O will join us.” Conner says as they leave and I go back to Uncle Tommy's room to start my detention.

“Get in the jeep Andrew we are going to the woods for your detention.”

“Let me guess if i find something prehistoric you will let me off detention the rest of my time? Conner Ethan and Kira told me that you gave them the same bargain.”

“Yea I will, but remind me to kill them when we train in 30 minutes ok.”

“Yes sir” I say to him with a laugh. After walking around for about 10 minutes I just happen to fall into a sinkhole and land fat on my ass in what looks like to be a lab. After I get up and make sure that nothing is broken i notice a gold coin with what looks to be a three finger claw in the middle of the coin. I put the coin into my pocket and start to smile to my self thinking i have just gotten out of detention when I see Uncle Tommy in the doorway.

“What are you doing here?” Uncle Tommy asks me in a stern voice.

“Honestly I do not know I was walking in the woods when I fell into a sinkhole and landed in here and found this.” I say as I try to hand him the coin and then all of a sudden my body starts twitching and is surrounded by what looks like green electricity and then I look at my body and see though a visor, why in the hell am I looking though a visor, what looks like to be green spandex covering my body.

“Say power down there is some explaining I need to do plus I need to run some tests on that coin.” Uncle Tommy says to me.

“Power down” I say and the spandex disappears from my body “Okay what just happened Uncle Tommy?”

“You know about the Power Rangers?”

“Yea, why shouldn't I”

“I am a ranger and Kira, Conner, Ethan, and Trent are also rangers and that coin you just gave me allowed me to become the green ranger when i was a teenager just like you did but the power coin was drained by Lord Zedd. I just need to see how the coin is getting power again, and how much it has, and if it can sustain it's power.”

“What if it is able to sustain its power?” I say to him.

“Then I will have no choice but to make you a ranger because with you knowing about us it would seem unfair to give the power to someone else.”

“What is this I hear about a new ranger?” Conner asks Uncle Tommy as he was coming in. “What are you doing here Andrew?” He says noticing me for the first time

“What can't I visit my uncle after I just happen to fall into a sinkhole that landed me into his lab?” I say innocently.

“Yes so did me, Conner and Ethan before we became rangers.” Kira told me.

“So Dr. O. What is this new power going to be?” Trent asks as Uncle Tommy comes forward holding what looks like an old morpher with I tried not to think my coin in it and gives it to me.

“I ran my preliminary tests and it looks like the coin is fully energized ,but i have to wait until Mesagog attacks and there is a battle. Until then the power is safe i want you to have it until the first attack. Then I will have to run another test to see if the power will hold. To Morph just have to point your morpher in the sky ,and then in front of you and yell 'it's morphin time'

and then 'DragonZord' the rest will come to you when you morph.”

CroweXV
07-19-2007, 01:13 PM
Grammar is lost on you. It's fairly Mary Sue, and everything is WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY too convenient. Also, way to plagiarize.

akermish
07-19-2007, 01:44 PM
“Now that you have the power there are 3 basic rules you need to follow.
No. 1. Do not use your power for personal gain. No. 2. Never eslcate a battle unless mesagog forces you to and 3 never revel your identity no one unless former rangers may know that you are a power ranger. Those were the same rules that was giving to me when I first became a ranger” Tommy says.
“now you have 2 informal rules you need to follow.” Kira told me as soon as Uncle Tommy was finished talking, “no.1 is that you have to go shopping and get some green clothes and no internet does not work for this because it would take to long for the clothes to get there.”
“rule numeral 2 is that you have to wash all of the zords by hand” Trent tells me. “just like I had to do when I joined the team.” He adds.
“What about the Dragonzord is it underwater?” I proclaimed to the team just as the alarm goes off signifying a monster attack/
“Ok, Andrew this is the first test of your powers play it safe out there and may the power protect you all.”
“Looks like Mesagog has not wasted any time in trying me” I say to them as we see the tyrannodrones attack downtown Reefside .
“Andrew stand down, we want to surprise Mesagog with you during a monster attack after he grows not during a normal tyrannodrone attack” Uncle Tommy says as the others get ready to morph.
“Dino Thunder Power Up” Conner, Kira, Ethan, and Uncle Tommy say.
“White Ranger Dino Power” Trent says after the rest of the gang morphed and they took there riders and atvs to the battle field. After 20 minutes of fighting tyrannodrones and a new monster called Kuzit and after they defeated Kuzit with the z-rex blaster and Mesagog made it grow I knew it was time to unleash the Dragonzord
“Hold on guys I’m coming with a little fire power”
“Good because we need it.” Trent says as they call their own zords into battle. All right here we go.
“It’s Morphin Time, Dragonzord.”
“Who invited you to the party ?” Kuzit said as I came up on the battle field .
“Who said I was invited, I am crashing this party with my Dragonzord.” I say as I prepare to call the zord from the sea. The zord must have transported to Reefside when I gained the power because it got here remarkably fast. As soon as I deployed missiles and hit Kuzit with them he bit the dust.
“lets get back to the Dino cave and then Andrew can start washing the zords” Uncle Tommy says to the group as we go to the riders and atv’s when all of a sudden I fell a tingling sensation goingf though my body and when we land I get up and ask.
“Where in the hell are we?”

akermish
07-19-2007, 01:50 PM
Grammar is lost on you. It's fairly Mary Sue, and everything is WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY too convenient. Also, way to plagiarize. i know my grammer is not the best and did you not read the disclaimer. if having andrew gain his power the same way that conner kira and ethan did is plagiarizing then shoot me and my oc is just an extension of myself. how do you know that Tommy was not trying to reenergized the coin. hope you like this next chapter

Cameron Samurai
07-19-2007, 02:56 PM
Oh, so rather than commit cardinal fanfiction sin number one (mary sue), you commited sin number two (putting yourself in it)

GundamExia
07-19-2007, 02:59 PM
i know my grammer is not the best

I'm so tired of hearing this.

Honestly, if you wanna butcher the English language anywhere else on the board, be my guest. But the Fanfic forum is the one place where proper spelling and grammar are VITAL. So if you're going to write fan fiction, GET BOTH RIGHT!

CroweXV
07-19-2007, 05:09 PM
The entire story just displays a complete lack of creativity, that's why people are banging on it. And it's not a huge sin to insert yourself into the fic, so long as you can objectionably place faults within the character. Your story has no format what-so-ever. There are no paragraphs and it's not a script. Give us something here. Why was Tommy recharging the Green Ranger powers? Why do the other rangers need the fire power of the Dragonzord when their zords have been perfectly capable to this point? There are no descriptions of anything, it's really just poorly written dialogue.